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    dots Submission Name: My Fantasydots
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    Author: iluvpoetry_1
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 802/433/117
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
    Total Views: 187
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    Bytes: 534



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       i dunno! dont ask im not having sex! just felt like writing this! comment plz i think the ending needs help! so comment!
    ~akaila evonne~


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    Emotions running. Passion growing.He's slowly kissing my neck.
    Then moving down to my navel.
    And down to my special place.
    I instanly arch my back.
    Pushing my hips against his.
    Getting dizzy with love.
    I don't want him to stop.
    Something is caught between my throat.
    Moaning like crazy.Holding him so close.
    I don't want him to let go.
    Don't know what to say.
    Don't know what to do.
    All I can can do is call out his name.




    Submitted on 2005-08-08 23:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      mmmmm. That was good. Oh what yes, Uh comments what can I say thank you for the unexpected thrill. aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAnd of course the commentary on whirlwinds and rainbows.

    Hauntedrose.

    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by hauntedrose | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL YELL IT GIRL SAY MY NAME (hold on) oh nevermind the poem isn't about me anyways I like this one VERY EROTIC!
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      WOAH! little tooooooo much of sex!...lol, i like it! a big turn on in a way.... make it longer and more exgageration!!
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey old friend, (actually I think I'm the old friend) :P But anyways, I like your use of imagery and how you tie in so many of the senses. Your not afraid to shy away from what's on your mind, which is a great quality to have in this art. Good piece and thanks for sharing.

    Travis
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by TZPhelps | [ Reply to This ]
      really great write lol and totally to the point but with good detail too for someone not doing this you sure write a good description lol reminds me of me n my bf lol
    anyways
    take care and keep writing
    izzi x
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one brought a smile to my face ..:)
    Quaite surprisingly ,i' dthink something like this would come across as being vulgar , but the way its been written made me feel very comfotrtable reading it and enjoying it too!


    Maybe you could finish it with something like this ...just a thought !:)

    Gripping my Face between my Hands
    I close my eyes to hide the shame
    But he's looking at me with love shining through his eyes
    I can't let him go back now with his goodbyes
    I have to give him the chance to finish this game
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      wow see wen u were telling me about it i thought there was some realy romantic dinner and such. but here u just completly skip over the dinner. i luv u lik a sis though gurl always

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      nice! i bet u had fun with this one. this one's gonna be one of my faves. what were u doing 2 make u write this? hmm? anyway good write babe. have fun at school. i go back on the 18th.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Takes me back to a very good place. This is fun, and sensual, and terribly tantalizing. For someone that isn't doing this, you sure describe it well. Uhmmm, I really like this. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]



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