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My Fantasy

Author: iluvpoetry_1
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i dunno! dont ask im not having sex! just felt like writing this! comment plz i think the ending needs help! so comment!
~akaila evonne~

My Fantasy

Emotions running. Passion growing.He's slowly kissing my neck.
Then moving down to my navel.
And down to my special place.
I instanly arch my back.
Pushing my hips against his.
Getting dizzy with love.
I don't want him to stop.
Something is caught between my throat.
Moaning like crazy.Holding him so close.
I don't want him to let go.
Don't know what to say.
Don't know what to do.
All I can can do is call out his name.

Submitted on 2005-08-08 23:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  mmmmm. That was good. Oh what yes, Uh comments what can I say thank you for the unexpected thrill. aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAnd of course the commentary on whirlwinds and rainbows.


| Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by hauntedrose | [ Reply to This ]
  LOL YELL IT GIRL SAY MY NAME (hold on) oh nevermind the poem isn't about me anyways I like this one VERY EROTIC!
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  WOAH! little tooooooo much of sex!, i like it! a big turn on in a way.... make it longer and more exgageration!!
| Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey old friend, (actually I think I'm the old friend) :P But anyways, I like your use of imagery and how you tie in so many of the senses. Your not afraid to shy away from what's on your mind, which is a great quality to have in this art. Good piece and thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by TZPhelps | [ Reply to This ]
  really great write lol and totally to the point but with good detail too for someone not doing this you sure write a good description lol reminds me of me n my bf lol
take care and keep writing
izzi x
| Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
  This one brought a smile to my face ..:)
Quaite surprisingly ,i' dthink something like this would come across as being vulgar , but the way its been written made me feel very comfotrtable reading it and enjoying it too!

Maybe you could finish it with something like this ...just a thought !:)

Gripping my Face between my Hands
I close my eyes to hide the shame
But he's looking at me with love shining through his eyes
I can't let him go back now with his goodbyes
I have to give him the chance to finish this game
| Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
  wow see wen u were telling me about it i thought there was some realy romantic dinner and such. but here u just completly skip over the dinner. i luv u lik a sis though gurl always

| Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  nice! i bet u had fun with this one. this one's gonna be one of my faves. what were u doing 2 make u write this? hmm? anyway good write babe. have fun at school. i go back on the 18th.
| Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Takes me back to a very good place. This is fun, and sensual, and terribly tantalizing. For someone that isn't doing this, you sure describe it well. Uhmmm, I really like this. Good job.
| Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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