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    dots Submission Name: Just Me And Youdots
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    Author: MurphyGirl44
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70/76/25
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    You are so shy, you hide your body from me, hoping to hide the scars I already see in your eyes...
    You fear that when you show yourself to me I will have a look of disgust upon my face
    I assure you I won't, those scars just remind me of how strong you are, how much you have been through...
    I only wish to ease the pain that has been stuffed down inside you for so long...too long
    I want to kiss your scars, kiss away those bad memories...
    I want to create new memories with you, to replace the bad ones...
    I can fill the emptiness in your heart, let me
    I offer myself to you, completely, take me
    Don't hide behind that mask anymore, I can see right through it into your soul, I want you to see into mine...
    It's only me, love, It'll always just be me...
    Me and you...




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      i saw in this powerful poem~ of a real love and a real soul giving to the ONE that has reach your soul ~of how one can take more than just there clothes off and give behind the skin~ a poem that rock my world toward a power that moves the love storm~ in my wanting hiding heart of always hiding~
    i like it~
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      You never cease to amaze me Kelly, from the moment we met until present...writing...so strong from the heart...
    I am at a loss of words.
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      how sweet! u really like this guy huh? i hope he opens up more to u more! this was really sweet about saying that u think he is strong! anyway good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was really deep.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write!, i love the whole hiding scars and kissing them away aspect of it, the poem has a great flow and sounds very understanding and sympathetic, loved it, by the way, love ur user pic...
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem. you can feel how strong the feelings are for this person. i love the part about creating new memories...good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Mahoganii | [ Reply to This ]
      Talk about relaxing...sheesh...my eyes got weary after reading this and the words were like a soothing neck and shoulder massage for the soul. Sweet. Thanks for sharing. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really emotional and just...nice. Sympathetic. Sweet. It's all been said and it's true about this piece. I like it just because it's really sweet. I guess the rhyming could be better, but there isn't really much that I would change. I really like "Dont hidebehind that mask anymore, I can see right through it into your soul, and I want you to see into mine" I dunno why, it's just stuck in my mind. I like the picture of yours above, too.
    Nice write.
    *Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by frozenconscienc | [ Reply to This ]


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