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Redeem me.

Author: nevender
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this is a prayer. to God, i have been down and i guess God has punished me a bit, i am asking for strength not to mess up again and keep in him always.

Redeem me.

I've suffered a fall
Nolonger walking tall,
I've been a fool
Didn't follow the rules:
So here I am-asking for mercy.

Not a lot to say
Only that maybe you'll forgive me anyway,
I'm fighting for my soul
Help me Lord, make me whole.

You desire truth and purity
And in man its found in scarcity,
But Lord, master of the universe
Heal me, free me from this curse.

Shield me again under your wings
That again your praises I shall sing,
That I shall awake in delight
Redeemed from the shadow back into your light.

Submitted on 2005-08-09 02:54:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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if we were living in the old testament times when ppl had to wail and lament before God to try and get him to change his mind then this would be an awesome write but we are not... and you know we are not...

lets have a lil think about the atrributes of God... God IS love... thats what he is! God IS faithful... thats what he is... what about grace...? isnt your life story on this site "gods grace rocks"?
Joel... you know that God isnt into punnishing you for your sins... if he was it would be YOU who died on that cross and that would be a HUGE punnishment coz not only would it be painful and death but also you wouldnt be a perfect sacrifice therefore wouldnt be redeemed... Christs death on the cross has redeemed you and bought you life Joel and therefore you are wasting your breath begging for redemption... you already have it!
need i go on coz i can... but i know you know all this...

if you need to talk to me you know how to find me... im not here to judge you and you know that i love you... please do not condemn yourself Joel...
| Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  ooookay, you're apologizing to God. What for?
Asking for forgiveness is one forgive me God for i have sinned. Of course we sin, it's in our nature. But it's what you do afterwards, after you've committed that mistake, what are you gonna do to make it back.

Imagine like having a g/f for example. If you do something wrong to her and you know it is wrong, aren't you gonna do something special for her or try to make a difference? Same thing.

When i saw prayer in your description, i thought it would of been something that i wrote "O my God". If you read it, you'll see what i mean, but i have seen nothing that i thought i would of seen.

Not that it's bad, just that these type of prayers need to be kept for yourself unless you want to share it with someone who needs to be redeemed or if you're asking for support.

Don't worry, God is merciful. He created you for a reason and if you do fall, it's not that he wanted to punish you, it's to test you. So what are you gonna do? Feel sorry for yourself? Keep asking for forgiveness and do nothing until a vision or something like that comes to you saying you're forgiven? What are you gonna do to make it better?
Think about it.
Ps: If ya wanna talk bout it, come and find me. Always welcomed to help.
| Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
  I think we all feel this way at some point in our lives. Then we see the rainbow at the end of the black void, the tunnel etc.

I dunno, I guess I have been here before. And not liked it one bit.


| Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

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