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    dots Submission Name: Little Girldots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       I wish I could be a little girl again. I never had to worry about anything.


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    dotsLittle Girldots
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    I used to play with Barbie dolls.
    I liked to fix their hair.
    I used to be afraid of the dark.
    I slept with a teddy bear.
    I used to roll around in the clovers.
    I used to catch fireflies.
    I finally learned to ride a bike,
    After what seemed like a million tries.
    I used to jump on the bed.
    I used to sing really loud.
    I used to lie on my bck in the grass
    And look for animals in the clouds.
    I loved to watch cartoons on Saturday mornings.
    Me and my sister played with Matchbox cars.
    I used to have sleepovers with my friends.
    I always loved looking at the stars.
    Me and my sis pretended like we were the girls on t.v.
    We had our box of dress up clothes.
    We played in my mom's makeup.
    We wore our hair in bows.
    I used to go trick-or-treating,
    Always spent the night at my aunt's.
    I hated skirts and dresses,
    Always wanted to wear pants.
    Jaz and I used to dance,
    Spin, twirl, and dip,
    Back when I'd never even heard of Nirvana,
    In those days when M.C. Hammer was hip.
    I wanna be that little girl,
    So innocent and carefree.
    I want to sing and dance and feel happy,
    Instead of just pretending to be.
    I used to play with Barbie dolls.
    Now I just mess up my hair.
    These days I embrace the dark.
    I still sleep with my teddy bear.




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      Sounds like you do the complete opposite of what you are told, I like that and I see that you might be not welcome, sorry. Well you should read some of my things and comment on them k, well later.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Gmann | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i loved this it's so true about how people change over time and fail to stay true to themselves i loved the rhythm it was wonderful i especially loved this line: I want to sing and dance and feel happy, ;Instead of just pretending to be. too many of us fake our emotions
    siara
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this because I can relate to it so much, even though I'm still only 15. I wish I was like in elementary school where nothing I did mattered so much. It rhymes, it flows. It's allover well done. I miss playing with Barbies...sadly enough I thought I'd never say that. Welllll done. Can't find anything wrong with it.
    *Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by frozenconscienc | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i am also being reminded about how much ive changed. how i used to know better about my limits and really only got in trouble for hitting my brother and sister. lol. cuz right now im only 15 and i look back at how much sh*it ive been through and i wonder what ever happened to me. structure wise this was fine. i didnt quite get what teh rhyme scheme was but thats ok it still flowed nicely in all. so really i have no complaints.

    brenna
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed reading this because i too miss those good ol' days when things were so much simpler. this was a very nice piece, and i liked the flow and the rhyming - fits well with the subject of the poem. i like how through this you not only remember how good it was to kid, but through that you show how life changes through growth. very good job
    ~bkj
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this i agree that it make you realise how much things have changed and even more so people.
    Again i'm not sure on the rhyming 'rhythm' so to speak but it was an enjoyable piece
    THanks
    John
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    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nostalgic. I am particularly impressed with the ending.
    'These days I embrace the dark,
    I still sleep with my teddy bear.'
    Although you have changed dramatically, still,you hold on to it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful wonderful poem...it made me laugh...we need a lot more funny poems here...
    I really liked the last line...you are still a little girl in some way though...you still sleep with Benard right? So we are all little at heart if you think about it...
    But again...very very good poem...

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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