You have lots of talent. Your flow is beautiful and the placement of the words masterful. Many writers here are writers but you are a poet. I should be envious but it's respect you've earned from me. That may not mean much but i can not give you any suggestions to change it is metaphoric and wonderfully clear at the same time... Beautiful Piece i shall read alot more of your work.
This was amazing. I love how you repeated the one stanza, which is my favorite of all "Here we are alone together, heartbeats distant, fingers laced. What's left to hold the picture perfect, when all the lines have been erased."...I just keep repeated that in my head and I love it. You have earned my respect also, because I just love this piece. It flowed well and rhymed nicely. Great metaphors all in all...and welcome to my favorite's list. *Melissa
This was very well done and the timing/rhyme was perfect! This was the second piece today that seemed to me to also be a song/lyrics. I enjoyed the whole piece and just found the stanzas to be very telling and descriptive but not overdone. Nothing about this seemed forced. Favorite! Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )