I like how the stanzas are broken apart; it gives it a feeling as if you are even whispering the poem to us. I love the subject matter being a nature nut. The rhyming works well too. Might want to check over spelling/typos (whisphers-> whispers). But I love it. Wish some wind would feel free to be my Guest now! lol
this was a very nice write about something that we often dont think too much about. i loved the rhyming and the word choice, it feels as gentle as the wind itself :) I also love the personification of the wind. great job ~bkj
Nice winderiffic poem :). Your rhyme scheme works well as usual :) I know, I know, it's been awhile since I've critiqued a poem but heh :) Anyways good job, I enjoyed it much :) Oh, and good luck with your friend:)
Sometimes poets here try to impress us with their stunning language. I am not a fan of being wowed by any kind of artist. If this is what you soul said, I like it all the more. So believable is the choice of words it rings like wind through chimes.
In the strophe about wind being a guest you might use
Seldom invited,. but always a guest.
instead of never. Hey thanks for leaving a note on my page too Tiff, you have a great weekend. So glad to hear you read your work! peace and love, Nan
very pretty, like the wind whsipering softly to me. if we listen, there are messages being sent on the breeze, don't you think? i always love the simplicity of your work, yet it always speaks volumes. peace&breezes @ Cat
For a quickie you sure know how to throw it out there This was just wonderful to read. And the rhythm was great too. It has a nice "airy" feel to it. You gave the wind an almost human side and I really liked that. You know, when you stop to listen, it really does seem as if the wind is whispering softly in your ear. In this, you have shared the adventures of the wind with us; dancing with the snow, and gliding with the birds..etc. A very enjoyable read. Great job! ~Sandra