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    dots Submission Name: killa flowdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 893



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       i was just flowin. tell me what u think. holla!


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    dotskilla flowdots
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    u thought i couldn't make it, boy please
    i'll blow up and show up
    in every video like Jody Breeze
    cuz this flow comes 2 me with ease
    and when u hear this peice, ur talking will cease
    cause me and rap belong like Nas & Kelis
    or like guns and police
    cuz i'm like Kanye except the fleece
    but my hearts in these streets
    as young kids are becoming deceased
    as i flow and make beats
    try walkin a mile with the shoes on my feet
    cuz i got places 2 go and plenty people 2 meet
    cuz whatever happens 2 me i won't flee
    i'll stand my ground
    but sometimes it feels like i'm lost and not found
    it's like i hear surround sound
    and don't know where it comes from
    even though i might have an attitude
    my family knows i still luv em




    Submitted on 2005-08-09 18:11:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really didnt like this one at all... i mean it just...was bad... the flow was ight...but the rhymes...aint tight. you gotta work on puttin the 2 2gether. i know were like beatin up on ya but thats how u get better. Work on it shortie.

    Love Always,
    AZak
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      man the stuff is sad its one of the worse writyes i have ever read u sould just get off the site now this is not fo ganster rapper and u live in a gated comunity any way wut do u know about being a gangster don't ever post again this [censored] souldin even be lyrics

    naw im just jokin the shit was straight



    heavy knowledge
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude, man...this pretty much sux....there isn't much else that anybody can say about it...keep workin on your lyrics. maybe u'll get better....If not...then don't worry bout it...find somethin else to do
    if you can make beats, I might have a job for ya
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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