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    dots Submission Name: REACHING OUTdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 408
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    Bytes: 443



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       not sure about this one hope you guys like it


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    dotsREACHING OUTdots
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    This conversation so rehearsed falls apart with the sound of your voice.
    I never wanted to feel you so
    God I love you
    Yes I can hold
    I want to crawl around in your presence.
    Kiss your feet
    I need you to punish me
    Hurt me
    Let me know I am forgiven
    Your silence screams in pain
    I know it I feel it too
    Yes of course call me back
    I love you




    Submitted on 2005-08-09 18:37:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this is very kunfuzing..welel i m young so i probably dont get it...but thats ok...it sounded really sad..like maybe you did sumthin and you regreat it...maybe..idk

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    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      dominatrix fantasy meets some sort of spiritual thingy? it was cool. i liked it. it was good.dominatrix fantasy meets some sort of spiritual thingy? it was cool. i liked it. it was good.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      someone's on repeat. someone's on repeat. lol. Was this a phone conversation or a meeting with your god? That's pretty confusing.But I think this is the best phrase I've ever read:
    Kiss your feet
    I need you to punish me
    Hurt me
    Let me know I am forgiven
    It's so raw but it says so much. Sort of my life story. But yea great write. I really did enjoy it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way it goes from one emotion to the next eg.
    Kiss your feet
    I need you to punish me
    Kinda sounds like a deranged phone conversation
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by chrls | [ Reply to This ]


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