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Author:	Hidden_depths
ASL Info:	20/F/England
Elite Ratio:	3.87 - 37/34/11
Words:	182

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	216
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1103

Description:
Me and my boyffriend are going through a rough time, I honestly don't know if we're gonna make it, and it is actually mostly my fault. I was really ill last and in a bid to focus I started writing and thinking about when we got together and the reasons. All that stuff. And this is just about how sorry I am that I jeopardised it.

Rose Tinted Glasses dots

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Christ, I'm an idiot!
I keep running through the gorgeous things that you said,
Then I freaked out, whats wrong with my head!?
You say the things that you mean inside,
And all I do is mess up, run and hide.

What did I do!
The first person so truthful and I pull away,
While my heart screams out 'I feel the same in every way'.
The fateful weekend I shall never forget,
One day ridiculously happy, next day full of regret.

God, forgive me, please babe
I cant explain where it came from I'm sorry to say,
But God how I've missed what I've all but thrown away.
I know I was a prat, Ive explained but can't go back.
I need you to forgive me so we can move on and relax.

I'm trying so hard!!
Looking back is too easy, with no way to fix then,
So I'm here trying now to build a future again.
I'm on edge with the effort I'm putting in here,
I'm hoping its not too late, thats my biggest fear.

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  Nice write, can't help to relate to how stupid us women can be sometimes? You shouldn't be to hard on yourself, it seems like your'e going through something now, which you don't understand and sometimes, we need this time, to get to know ourselves. If this man really loves you, I'm sure you guys will get back together again. Nice poem, here and there a word that through me off a bit, but not even worth mentioning. Well done, keep it up
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Lee | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a great write. Women...sometimes I don't understand why we do what we do! The other problem is that people never really realize what they had until it's almost completely gone, then you're struggling to hang onto that tiny little thread. I know this feeling well, believe me! The pain and regret is clear in this write and I totally understand what you're saying. I wish nothing but the best for you and hope that everything turns out the way that you'd like it too. Great job!
Candi
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow.. nice writing. People make mistakes and you just have to remember that. All will work out for the best, even if it's not what you think is the best. I liked your choice of words in here, the rhythm was good as well, it seemed as thought it just came and you didn't have to sit and think about whats going to rhyme with what. I love how you start each stanza with a main sentence point that you follow through about IN the stanza.

Sometimes we get caught up in whats going on and even though we want to do or say another thing we don't. We freeze and instead of telling them that we love them we push ourselves away. I think of it sort of being a defense mechanism because we're pushing ourselves away because we're scared, mainly of getting hurt but of everything else that comes with making a commitment.
Anyways sorry to drag on, hope Im coming from the right persective on this one. Hope that all works out well with you and your man!
Good luck!
~Manda
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]

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