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    dots Submission Name: Herald To The Reaper pt.2dots

    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Alright, Herald To The Reaper is over. There is no more. I hope you like this, it took me a while.
    I didn't put much try into the rhythm of this piece.
    So if it seems kind've forced that's why.
    It's just about a lamenting reaper or whatever you imagine him to be really. For that you really don't need MUCH rhythm it's "lamenting."( hehe ) Also, if it kind've doesn't flow to each stanza I'm sorry,
    Please leave comments. :)

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    dotsHerald To The Reaper pt.2dots

    Resonating shear objections to her fatility,
    her smile is the destructions frailty.
    The impertinent design for obstruction,
    symphonic display,a game of dark seduction.

    Still some subtle darkness clinging to the woman,
    nights luminescent cry of light, filtering through her figure casting an elegant strand.

    Dark poetry written in bloodshed,
    for his poem is of dread.
    A miscreation,
    an abomination of the undead.

    scratching tears of times infinite sleeping,
    depicting the poets story,
    of laying a potent hand of the demolishing.

    Slaying predicting another lapsed caprice.
    Tonights dark whimsical echo of deceased,
    for the cries of Death's priest.

    Submitted on 2005-08-10 04:46:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dude no diss ment i just saying
    its not my style i dont know
    i like wordy sublimalal complex and a large vocab.

    its really not that bad i did like the first reaper better

    ill try to right one you can see it like tomarow or something like that
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      right well its ok i dont like it as much as some it was good still and could be better with work

    there are guidelines to the works of man
    he is what he has spoken
    and harsh words are like a wip
    a cat of nine tails to kill a christ
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      "Resonating shear objections to his fatality,
    her smile is the destruction of infirmities;
    her impertinent designs of her fertility,
    symphonic displays of dark familiarities.

    Still to subtle darkness clings a woman,
    on nights luminescent cries of delights,
    filter through bones her figure glares,
    she cast her elegant strands of hair.

    Ah, dark poetry written in bloodshed,
    for his poem is the dread maceration,
    an abomination from the undead lie.

    Lamenting, scratching tears of time,
    infinite sleeping, depicting a poets muse,
    her potion exhumed, a poet's hand demolish.

    Slaying, predicting another lapsed caprice,
    tonight his dark whimsical echoes one deceased,
    from the cries of Death's Priests bloody hand chopped. "

    hi, thanks for re-write? tom
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, no problem, your verse really poor, just trying to wake you up, so sorry go back bed. tom
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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