To Love or to Lie by Lee

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Submission Name: To Love or to Lie dots

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Author:	Lee
ASL Info:	29/F/South Africa
Elite Ratio:	4.57 - 55/54/14
Words:	94

Class/Type:	Poetry/Sorry
Total Views:	244
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Description:
Based on some true aspects of my life, but I got a bit carried away towards the end.

To Love or to Lie dots

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I wouldnt fall again
guess that I did

Thousand and one emotions
snarl through my head

Pulverize, shatter, break to bits
my heart is wounded,
fatally

My beautiful man with your honest face
I love you to death
But you never said the same

Your mysteries have come to light
blinded me
But gave me sight

Im slipping now and will surely fall
depression, grave
place unknown

But the stains you left will make me strong
Ill be back, remember my words
I will love you,
to death....

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  I don't like the i'll be back in the last stanza. It sounds a bit creepy like a ghost coming back I dunno.

Otherwise I have no nitpicks.

It is typical. We fall out of love and we say that is it. I will never fall in love again. Then someone comes along, sweeps us off our feet and leaves and we hurt again.

But the worse is when u meet someone who you know you will love to death maybe even beyond, and he leaves.
Somehow they do not share your feelings, you are not their unforgettable love. And there the hurt is doubled, tripled maybe...

You reach places yet unknown in pain. And still you cannot but love that man.

It was simply but wel written.
I think m gonna tour your page.

Viviane

| Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
  That is a heck of an ending. I just got one question. Per the title; who was dishonest? You say he had a honest face and did not tell you he loved you, apparently he ended up breaking your heart so it is not like he lied or, do you mean he lived a lie by leading you on. I really enjoyed this write. I had to take a deep breath after reading that ending. I am going to read the one before this one I missed it, also I head to Iraq in a few days, so keep writing I may need something to lift my spirits while I am being shot at.
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey this is even more captivating...Guess you really did meticulously craft it. You certainly did a phenomenal job...This piece is really moving...Whoever that person is must know that they lost a dime...This is the type of piece you want to meditate upon when you have lost someone you really held dear to your soul!Moreover it has a healing element to it...its very soooooooothing!I enjoyed reading this piece!I will be checking out more of your work!Kindest thoughts...Nobantu
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the end, as well as the rest. This is really good. There is nothing i don't like about it. It kind of reminded me of a story, and i really enjoyed reading it. The last part is probably my favorite:

"But the stains you left will make me strong
Ill be back, remember my words
I will love you,
to death..."

Thats awesome. You're definitely talented. I love the title too. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked the ending to this and actually found it kind of eerie/creepy.

"Ill be back, remember my words
I will love you,
to death... "

Makes me think that you're going to go back and get revenge on the guy because he hurt you. lol I always end up interpreting poems in strange ways. I don't know.. Maybe others see the same? Aw well.

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| Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by Mrs Peabody | [ Reply to This ]

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