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    dots Submission Name: Sanctuarydots
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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Awaiting sanctuary in him

    The sunlight breaks upon my skin
    With morning comes answered prayers
    His gift to me....masked beneath a sweet smile
    Hypnotizing eyes,a genuine heart

    So delicate, so fraile
    Still, the potential....amazing.
    Overwhelming
    Yet this is what was sought

    With heart-filled hope
    Heaven sent dreams
    The next steps only bringing us closer
    Doubt forgotten, replaced by what is real

    His words bring jubilation
    He sits...as I do
    Configuring, calculating...just what will it take?
    We can make this happen, the lord...our guide

    Yearning to belong...
    Belong to him.

    Awaiting sanctuary in him.......







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      This Write is beautiful
    You are showing us how much a person has made an impact on you
    I believe you were writing about a family member or friend
    Yes God has brought both of you joy
    I pray it continues
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Classy. This is a really well written poem, full of heart and truth. It's as if you opened yourself up and just let it fall all over the paper as you wrote.

    Whoever this guy is he's damn lucky. I hope he realizes what he's got?

    In awe- Grey
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      breathless, speechless, wow. it's passionate, it's beautiful, it's blatantly sincere, it's amazing. sounds like this guy really got underneath your skin. sounds like one of those things most people dream about and read about and hear about but never experience...
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      wow I am feeling just like Treybur... it's very passionate... beautiful, and blatantly sincere... and it is also very amazing... I mean honestly some of these type of pieces suck completely because they are mostly fantasy... and you can tell they are fantasy... but this is a very nice a calm piece...

    So yes I hope to read a lot more of your writes... THNX

    - Nammy
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      A very beautiful poem. I've been there myself. Ahhhh true love. Ain't it a wonderful thing? Keep on writing it can only get better
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by chrls | [ Reply to This ]
      Its sincere. I thought at the end you were writing about God. Which I couldn't relate to any more than I could relate to love but it was a very light poem. Nicely put and very passionate.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW!
    This is beautifu, emotional and very passionate.
    I have nothing negative to say about this wonderful piece.
    I hope the guy appreciate your feelings. He should read this. A great write, take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me of the Song Of Solomon from the Old Testament. It has the reverie and adoration of two lovers, intertwined hearts and devotion. This was a lovely read.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      His words bring jubilation
    He sits...as I do
    Configuring, calculating...just what will it take?
    We can make this happen, the lord...our guide

    i liked this stanza, to have love and god as a guide is something truly special.. if anything else would have been expressed in this i would say that i really liked that picture of you ;)... but with so much emotion and care about someone, then why bother, because it seems like you are fully content, in heart, soul, and pen.. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]


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