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    dots Submission Name: Madnessdots

    Author: forestspirit
    ASL Info:    21/m/inside
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 58/45/27
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this in like 5 minutes or something. It was a complete spur of the moment like thing which just flowed. I stopped when it stopped flowing. This was sut before a gig, I just jotted it down. It would be nice to have opinions on it................No idea why that is the name but I guess it has something to do with the state of mind I had

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    A whisper in the wind
    Shadows of the light
    Along the misty mountains
    Frail against the sinned

    Moonlight with its ambience
    Making love amidst the sea
    Raging fire raving madness
    Struggling to be free

    In the realm of darkness
    Obscuring clarity of a dream
    A dagger glowing brightness
    Howling near the stream

    A barren tree oceanís soul
    Cast away lost in whole

    Submitted on 2005-08-10 15:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes i can definately tell you just quit when your mind went blank. cause it doesnt truly end. it just stops like bam all of a sudden. its like i just start to zone out and get lost in it and it stops. i can tell you that i will probably add this as a favorite and when i get bored try addeing something to it. if thats ok. well anyways i cant really feel what you were thinking when writing this piece but as always i shall try. i tried... lol i just re read this about 5 times and thinking hard on it. i have no idea. i guess that this piece is too in depth for me. so now i am also gonna have a task to do for the next few hours. lol. but i do love how you worded it and when i figure out the meaning (i always gotta find the meaning) i will comment once again. i really love this piece i do.

    take care
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there,
    I think it will be a good write once it is completed.
    So far what you have is a good flow, continue with it and we shall see a difference.
    Please complete your piece...take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      You definitely have a good thing going here. The flow is good, the imagery is good as well, it just seems incomplete. This definitely has the potential to be great.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]

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