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    dots Submission Name: So Hornydots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Bytes: 363



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    dotsSo Hornydots
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    my brain's craving that dope
    I mean
    that synapse square dance
    "now percolate!"
    the mess gone hummin
    south and out
    hither and yon
    jammin, mon
    tinglin in the hinterlands
    stormin the netherworld
    fumbling in bumblefuck
    get your
    ...clothes off
    and I do mean NOW!




    Submitted on 2005-08-10 15:26:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes Ma'am!

    Fel, this is a delightfully different side to lust and carnal longing...showing the offside part of the brain that becomes quickly a one-track mind!

    Very interesting...very hot and earthy,

    I loved it.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was... a little... werid.

    But in all in all it was freaking awesome.

    i mean you don't usually see these kind of writes here on ES but I mean this one was just put out there. And Ireally like the title...

    I mean honestly... I shall take my clothes off if you want, but not for you... now if my girlfriend told me to... do... this... oh sry nvm....

    anyway good write THNX

    - Nammy
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah!

    Ok!

    My Pants are down and I'm eagerly awaiting your steamy, marshy wetlands!

    Like everything else you do this was unique and hot!

    I'm off for a cold shower!!!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm...ya dont have to shout it at me...I was half naked by the time I finished reading the title...HA!

    This was categorized as passion and it was cock full...ummm...I mean chock full of that. Like the feeling you described, short and to the point. Cool beans.
    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      lol love the comments that were already written here...very funny...love the fact that it was very to the point... :) great job

    christianne
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      OK ALL YOU HORN DOG GUYS! THIS was written for ME... Jealous? U bet your stiffie I am. HEH HEH HEH I get the prize ne ways.
    Hun- maybe you should just read me this kinda stuff in the future. LOL
    LOVE
    ur hubby
    Ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      I doubt you could have gotten any more attention on this site (unless, of course, you were a nudist). This is probably about as straightforward as deisre can be expressed and still be clean. Definite proof writers think with more than their brain. Bon apetit.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Ay amor, you definately just get right to the point huh? I like that and i liked this piece. It was a bit short I would have loved to hear you continue but still it was very stimulating.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      i enjoyed the last few lines.. get right to the point.. the mid part kinda threw me off track, but thats just me.. when i seen the title i didnt think to come read words such as those lol.. i was thinking of more.. well ill just keep that to myself lol.. good job either way
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      i thouroughly enjoyed reading that. its actually just what i needed. i want to get laid so bad, but one thing leads to another and, i fart and she runs, so...yeah~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, any thing remotely sexual or drug-related in a title pulls them in like flies. I liked the Jamaican dialect in this. My favorite phrase in this is "synapse square dance." You only need one ellipsis in my opinion, and it should only have three dots. Anyway, this is a cute write. Honestly, I thought this was going to be a joke about a goat or something.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      . . . just startd unbuttoning my shirt . . .then the read was finish so now im really feeling unfinished . . . .*running to get ma phone*. . . *brilliant*. . . .*got a number*. . . .

    Fun the blunt, 2the point idea u portrayed

    Keep spreading the Love
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      Know the feeling, have been feeling it a lot lately. I like the simplicity and the end, it just sort of hits you. It's like what was running through your brain while you were waiting fpr this guy to pick up the hint and just take you. But he doesn't, so the mind rant stops and you take control. I like that. Good Write!
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]


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