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Loving You in the Nighttime

Author: babixpeaches
ASL Info:    17/f/nyc
Elite Ratio:    5.92 - 94 /90 /24
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Yea. Nighttime sucks. Cry so much.

Oh yea, inspired by the awe-inspiring Michio Kaku and his book, "Hyperspace," and of course, my feelings.

Loving You in the Nighttime

I loathe you Night, an entity
of endless dimensions; a warping
of time and spatial connections,
invisible ether material- grasped,
but it remains
not within the grasp-
I loathe your diffusive,
incessant laughs
chasing recovery beyond my clasp,
bringing upon
your stubborn mission,
a fatal blow
to my mindless addiction.

Submitted on 2005-08-10 19:04:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  No one should have to spend the night alone in sadness so all of us here shall share in your tears. And curse this retched thing we call night and the names of those who left us here. Till in the light of morning we may find forgiveness in our hearts and the courage to walk on alone. Though it may seem like forever till sunrise a new day will come.

The poem is fantastic, I will have to read this Michio Kaku book it must be very compelling to inspire such words.
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| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by mcgovern_xiii | [ Reply to This ]
  mindless addictions are so common in this society.. so are entities and lonely nights that seem so wrong.. i enjoyed the thought you brought out and the reasoning behind not saying something straightforward, i admire that.. good job on making people think
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]

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