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    dots Submission Name: Veteran of The Psychic Warsdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    56/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2733/1296/258
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Despite the title and the subject matter, this actually is a description of writer's block.


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    dotsVeteran of The Psychic Warsdots
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    Hushed folk song
    on the corner porch,
    bearer of keen myth;
    each maxim matched
    its mandible, slippery
    as human wit, if
    fine gold could
    be spun of this, each
    sharp disappointment
    would twist to bliss,
    and cruelty would speak
    with a softer tongue;
    bright, flat teeth
    for herbs and wine,
    no recollection
    of the time
    the perfection of past
    and future won
    in bullet-time,
    with a kiss.

    Well...
    Until I'm cradled in
    sweet oblivion,
    I'll live the livid
    misery I adore,
    share these
    downturned streets
    with somnambulent
    plankton, another
    veteran of
    the psychic wars.




    Submitted on 2005-08-10 20:38:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Blue Oyster Cult anyone? I love them a lot. "You see me now, a veteran of 1000 psychic wars, I been livin on the edge so long..." Anyway. I really enjoyed the last verse, living the livid misery we adore and whatnot. And somnambulent plankton is a wonderful title and description for those who walk my downturned streets. I enjoyed the read. Peace. -rue
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      The words are so...melodic. I try to listen to the words like they're a song...not lyrics but the tone of the words and your words are beautiful. Its a whispered desciption, soft and a bit harsh...and its late so I porbably don't make much sense...
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      Its beautiful... but for some reason I couldn't grasp it. Congratulations for writing something totally over my head! Oh and the title and the whole "veteran of psychic wars" idea is just awesome. It sold me from the get-go~
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by LadyInRed88 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice I did'nt understand it at first so i read it again. I've had writer's block before but I've never been able to write about it. Huh maybe the writer's block blocked that too. Haha oh that's funny and sad. Oh well good write keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      this was excellent...all the way around.

    the flow was impressive and your writing is trully dynamic and engaging.

    9.5/10

    check some of my work out...i'd like you opinion.

    Demetrius
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by demetriusandrew | [ Reply to This ]
      this was excellent...all the way around.

    the flow was impressive and your writing is trully dynamic and engaging.

    9.5/10

    check some of my work out...i'd like you opinion.

    Demetrius
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by demetriusandrew | [ Reply to This ]


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