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    dots Submission Name: my rubberband and medots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
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       i don't know just some dark comedy for ya' tell me what you think

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    dotsmy rubberband and medots

    my rubberband and i are friends
    we get along just dandy
    and when i think of cutting
    he really comes in handy

    he leaves little marks
    but not like a razorblade
    his marks don't last
    his marks fade away

    my mommy watches me snapping
    but she doesn't say a word
    she just mutters to herself
    "what's wrong with my baby girl?"

    i want to tell her i'm okay
    she needn't worry or fear
    because one day i'll wake up
    and my rubberband won't be near

    someday i'll fix myself
    "this little problem" my mommy calls it
    but what she doesn't see
    is the razor hidden in my closet

    ha ha he he it's locked away
    i've hidden it from veiw
    you'll never see the marks
    cuz i'll hide them from you

    i'll wear long shorts
    for the cuts are on my legs
    and if you happen to see...
    i cut myself shaving

    you'll say "okay"
    but look at me a little funny
    but all i will say is "don't worry momma"
    and smile at you bright and sunny

    you'll belive i'm okay
    and smile a bit
    and i'll smile back
    knowing that the razor sits

    sits lying in my closet
    waiting to be used
    and wondering why
    my wrist is blue

    "my rubberband is blue silly"
    i'll laugh at it and say
    "but don't worry baby,
    you'd beat it anyday"

    Submitted on 2005-08-10 22:38:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this was dark. And a very sad thing to go through. I thought your flow was very good. And the words used in the poem were good also. And the fact you wrote as if you were letting us in on a little secret made it even better. Good writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really like it i think your wordings very good and adds power to your poem. and i can relate to it very well i never used a rubberband but i used other things my firend wear rubberbands for that reason and so it hit home. its so sad but in the ame way you give it a light hearted twist and i think thats what makes it such a good piece
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      i totally love this poem, its definatley your best, i have to do this with the rubberband, but it only helps sometimes, i can relate about you have lie to others that your not doing it, i adore the second to last stanza, really good imagery in this poem, kudos!
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting write here. though i liked it very much. its like being one way you know teehee happy around everyone yet deep inside you hate all. for when i read this its like yea i just have a habit of snapping a rubberband but youll never know my true deep secret hidden within.
    "sits lying in my closet
    waiting to be used
    and wondering why
    my wrist is blue

    "my rubberband is blue silly"
    i'll laugh at it and say
    "but don't worry baby,
    you'd beat it anyday""

    i like these stanzas the best. well anyways i enjoyed reading.

    take care
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]

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