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    dots Submission Name: Soondots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    A perspective on faith.

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    Perhaps I've lost perspective here,
    by holding on so very long
    to that which rarely seemed sincere,
    but gladly fed my constant fear
    that I could never be as strong.

    Soon I believed what others said
    and saw reflected through their glass,
    a lesser form than light would shed,
    a shadow, frail and underfed.
    Soon what I saw then came to pass.

    But when I stood upon my own,
    free from the lies I thought were true,
    unhindered by great fears I'd known
    with arrow's speed, my faith had grown,
    aloft, my heart and spirit flew.

    Soon I shall rise from broken clay
    to share from God's abundant store,
    that which He kept each rainy day
    as I was lost along the way.
    Soon, we shall cherish all the more.

    The Gadfly

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      this is very Yeats like...the rhyme structure, that is. i enjoyed. Yeats is my favourite poet, so that's a big compliment. haha. i liked the message behind this. that you have to work through all the lies and jealousy of others, and grow within yourself. which proves that you ARE strong enough. especially with the Lord. : ) i'm not the most religious person, but i deffinantly believe in God...and this peice gave me a warm feeling in my heart for sure. <3
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]
      the soon i shall rise part i really liked.. but for different reasons.. i shall rise from being simple with an ironclad fist backed with the faith of god and that is what i got from this... and i must applaud you for being able to write this format.. i couldn't do it
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, meaningful, and true. I love reading things like this...such meaning.
    My favorite part~

    Perhaps I've lost perspective here,
    by holding on so very long

    It says so much to me and I think it was so poetic, but I guess when it comes form a poet what can ya expect?
    Again another beautiful piece for me to read.
    Thank you
    Until next read
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Greg, this is lovely! A beautifully written and very well expressed poem. And the format you have used further compliments the poem. And ya know, faith is a funny thing. I have always prided myself to be a believer. To put my faith in the lord and really believe ya know? I am not overly religious but I have my faith. Sometimes however, I question that faith. Things happen in life and they seem to have no good reason. They are very painful and always seem to happen to good people. It is then that I wonder...why? Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this poem you have written. You always write such beautiful pieces! Thanks for the read and take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Faith! Certainly something worth holding on to in life, without it.. one is lost. I enjoyed this piece because of the hope it gives to the reader.. and the positive outlook it shows about life here.. and the one here-after.
    It starts off with faith fading... then the great comeback in the latter stanzas where faith rises and hope is again found and embraced.
    I couldn't help but smile a bit thinking of God storing up on rainy days.
    Quite meaningful though.. and very well written.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your comments on my "Seasons"
    I thought this was an excellent power of faith as well as a push toward acceptance. My faith often waivers but as of yet has not failed. The line about the broken clay touched me. i am in recovery from drugs and alcohol and that is pretty descriptive of what it is like to come back from the edge of reality. Thank You POPPA JON
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by poppa jon | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an insprirational piece! It gives a ton of hope to people facing dark and yucky times. Faith can do amazing things and to me is the best medicine in life! Thank you for this write!
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]

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