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    dots Submission Name: Upside and Sidewaysdots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 1013
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 1200
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 6077



    Description:
       Ante up bitches. Guns-a-blazin'


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    dotsUpside and Sidewaysdots
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    Fuck That
    We roll more fools than mercades
    Fuck That
    We turn these grown men to ladies
    Fuck you
    Uptown, Downtown
    Upside and sideways
    Sunday to Friday till sun down(2x)

    (Aknahlij_d 1)
    I shape the darkness of heartless hogs wit caution
    You talking shit, you must not listen to hip-hop often
    Promoted to sergeant, the first man in history
    To use words to hurt you AND break you down physically
    You screaming bloodly murder soon as you see me on your scope
    Can't nobody cope with ole Yella, feed this old dog a new joke
    Before you know it, I'll be battling trying to choke
    And some plagarist'll be spitting shit i already wrote, so
    I tip my hat, flip the glass, nip and the scab
    I'll throw the last few bouts out, because my opponents' contents were trash
    You don't know a damn thing, once I spoke up
    Thinking you was on top just when I erupt
    Ante up, toss in your pay check
    Don't take help from lost causes cuz every biter in your squad is next
    People don't applaud till you and your whack crew break for my exit
    No limit soldier, but your tank is sceptic
    Sit back and watch P write this epic
    I'll take a break and pick the pen up right where I left it
    your pulse is quicker than my words
    young N.O. fiend keep shit crisp like curd
    metaphorically killin niggaz with no feelins
    buckets of ducets cuz piece of paper dollars peelin off the ceilin
    most raps fall in this category
    like slick rick u hot but u tell the same story
    obligitory to wax the fat of big asses
    actions speak like atombombs p-jizza lays on the masses
    im cripplin the big-headed niggaz
    chicken non-breaded niggaz
    weight in the feathers niggaz
    im dating women named heather, niggaz
    my scheme is better than niggaz who pack gats
    scratchin at the chance to take that good cat back, fuck that

    Fuck That
    I roll more fools than mercades
    Fuck That
    I turn grown men to ladies
    Fuck you
    Uptown, Downtown
    Upsaide and sideways
    Sunday to Friday till sun down(2x)

    (solemnpen)
    a real player or just chopped beef
    making everybody believe
    that a white boy from the country can be an emcee
    even with half the world hating on me
    drooling at the mouth jealous of me
    haters turned believing because they learned iím street
    darksyde has to bound me with chains
    so i wont go crazy, gut you while i whisper your name
    the pen bleeds uncontrolably, my mind is in warp speed
    more psycho than a dope fiend for selling him bad seed
    mamas cussing daddys for giving them bad seed
    so i feed them the words, that they desperatly need
    higher than 50 cent, im not heaven bound, im ghetto bent
    on biting everybody that tries to pet me
    iíll fuck your girl with a smile if sheíll let me
    turn over write the rhyme, that told of the sex
    then let the dsyde emcees spin the hook.. cmon dawg bet me
    done lost your damn mind, you think this just for fun
    so as i show you a thing or two on this mic, iíll pat you on the head and call you son
    im the one holding this laser pointer, listen to your teach preach
    show you how to use to words in 2 lines, show you how to be a good pupil
    Fuck up and dont listen, and the next dsyde ryder will stab you in the pupil
    take your eyeball out, throw it in the can..get another pen from the sale stand
    as he gets ready to write the next hook, while i make you look like that fool "Stan"
    With another group of insulting praises, my pen brings your mind through a maze
    just to make myself feel good, i give notebooks to kiddies in my hood
    and tell em to go steal pens from that ole bastard, Mr.Wood
    Just remember you only get one wish to be like me, to write like me
    If I sold my rhymes, Iíd go broke, cause nobody could afford em
    You trying to draw plans against me, you better abort em
    cause im the king of this castle, i dont express insults, I hoard em
    Go back to burger king, shout something to your mama, very obscene
    Trying to race pen to pen, you gonna cause a murder scene, because
    you dont have the dedication, trying to be me, will get you in a highway ditch
    Solemnpen signing out, after spitting it MY WAY bitch

    Fuck That
    I roll more fools than mercades
    Fuck That
    I turn grown men to ladies
    Fuck you
    Uptown, Downtown
    Upsides and sideways
    Sunday to Friday till sun down(2x)

    (unknown soldier)
    yo it's the anonimous one
    the soldier proclaimin battles he's already won
    nahlij asked me e bring the lyrical majesty
    causin earthquakes, tsunamis,
    and other global catastrophes
    u know i'm reppin Darksyde 2 the fullest
    my mind is like a trigga, it goes off when i pull it
    i words were bullets, u'd already be dead
    every verb is like a slug
    aimed straight at ur head
    now it's time 2 lay back and chill with the poets
    what i spit is real and u already know it
    all i need is a beat 4 me 2 flow with
    and i'll give u a hit
    if stones don't affect u
    then i'm coming with sticks
    so u betta get some form of protection
    cuz i've prepared these lines 2 perfection
    Darksyde Yakuza Republic
    we got the worldwide connection

    Fuck That
    I roll more fools than mercades
    Fuck That
    I turn grown men to ladies
    Fuck you
    Uptown, Downtown
    Upsides and sideways
    Sunday to Friday till sun down(3x)





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    ||| Comments |||
      The chorus was sick. I [censored]ed with all three verses. And the punchlines were good.
    "People don't applaud till you and your whack crew break for my exit
    No limit soldier, but your tank is sceptic
    Sit back and watch P write this epic
    I'll take a break and pick the pen up right where I left it"
    Clever [censored]
    "Go back to burger king, shout something to your mama, very obscene
    Trying to race pen to pen, you gonna cause a murder scene"
    Not real clever but, tight line
    "yo it's the anonimous one
    the soldier proclaimin battles he's already won"
    Nice opening.
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      damn man.. this is nice .... alla yalls verses was good... you wanna do a somethin with the ab. kings... if so hit me up...


    Deuce
    The aberrant soldier
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      yo p we should do a follow up and call it sideways and upside and this time u could wait for me b4 u post u impatient [censored] nice shyt though i saw angeloutlaw liked troys best *wink wink* im ready to start postin again so be ready
    D.Y.R. 4 life niggaz
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by lost omen | [ Reply to This ]
      aiyo that hook was tight.. lemme know the way the beat goes so i can get it down... and i liked your [censored].. making people think.. troy was off to,that was one of the cleanest collabos ive seen on a poetry site.. holla at me p

    solemnpen
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      the first verse seemed a bit forced.. its like you are trying to hard to force rap with something intelligently said.. dont get me wrong i enjoyed it, but the way people think these days, they will only see the nellys the 50 cents and the dancing that occurs with rap.. they wont see the message no matter how much you write..

    the 2nd verse seemed a bit outta format, but it did also seem a bit cocky.. like this guy has nothing else to do but write about himself.. he did make some valid points though, as i thought he was the best of the 2, but i just didnt like his flow.. he should have stayed with the same rhyme a few more lines, instead of cutting it off abruptly...

    the 3rd verse had a lot of grammar errors, but still it had some valid points.. i enjoyed the part about if words were bullets you would already be dead.. that was original and poetic to say..

    all in all as a 3 person collaboration, i think this is a success... but a little revision and could become something great.. not an adjective used much on this site.. at least not by me

    but the order of being good goes as follows
    2nd verse
    1st verse
    3rd verse

    the chorus or hook as yawll call it, was also good.. i believe it linked the 3 verses very well
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]
      hot shvt. i'm glad ya'll brought it. both of yall verses were well over 20 bars fellas. i shoulda wrote more. now it feels like i was just singing a bridge or something. anyway i agree with cade. this was just as good as hip hop poetry if not better. we outta get tweet on this damn site. he coulda contributed 2 this shvt.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how solemn and soldier comment on their own piece. Amusing. Probably not in the best mood to comment, but what the h3ll, right? I liked Troy's best. Later kid.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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