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    dots Submission Name: 47 years agodots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots47 years agodots
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    They sit alone
    on a bench
    in a park.
    They’ve come here
    every Saturday
    for the past
    47 years.
    Sitting in silence
    as they eat the same sandwiches
    they’ve eaten those
    past 47 years.
    Ham for the Mr.
    Turkey for his Mrs.
    She feeds the pigeons
    with her usual extra
    three pieces of bread,
    especially for them,
    while he holds her hand.
    The wind blows through
    their grey wisps of hair.
    They smile wrinkled smiles
    as they watch the young couples.
    And their eyes are as bright as ever.

    While it may be routine,
    but their love is as strong as it was,
    when they met
    in that same park,
    on that same bench,
    47 years ago.




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 04:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ,its commendable that someone your age would write something so strong.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem was nice because it proved that love can last and isn't just something find and lose but some are able to hold on to it for long periods of time... i really liked it and it was deep for being only 16
    siara
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is very sweet. Personally,I've always gone 'awwwwwww' whenever I see old couples holding hands. They're very rare,though. But when you do see them,it's like discovering diamonds in the dust. Makes you hope,because life's not that bad after all.
    You write about optimistic,feel-good stuff a lot. That's refreshing,very nice. :) Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]


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