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    dots Submission Name: An Eternal Sunsetdots
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    Author: zhi wei
    ASL Info:    17, Male, Malaysia.
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 171/203/53
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I don't usually write about love, but here goes nothing. Thoughts appreciated.


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    dotsAn Eternal Sunsetdots
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    In the short-lived sunset of the evenings
    do I often sit and wonder;
    My attempt in the art of appreciation
    of a temporary, transient splendour.
    For if even this glorious end of day,
    in all its majesty, only momentary,
    Then are we fools, drowned in passion;
    Believing permanence to be a possibility?

    O, ítis so difficult to doubt such a matter!
    When my mind has only memories to miss
    Of our two hearts entwined,
    embraced in a kiss.
    But this loveless, unfeeling question,
    shall I leave uncared and ignored.
    I shall prolong my difficulty of doubt
    For the reminiscence of love
    is a sufficient reward.

    My love,
    You now spread wings of the angels
    And the hours of your breathless absence
    Turn not to minutes,
    but to undying days without your presence.
    Yet our love shall remain, always,
    as ítis meant to be
    And unlike these fleeting sunsets,
    From transience we are free
    And our love shall live on
    for eternity.




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 06:45:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The longing for love, to me is always the most painful wait, then, a not so painful loss. we see a beautiful person and soul, we are tempted to stay with it, but when you lose it, we all fall differently. some search for it again, some call for another, and some just dont react. Isn't that strange, the whole fucntion of the human heart and emotion?
    it was an outstanding poem, very very creative and authentic...transcience. you were missing the c...ans transcient. or am i wrong...hmm...tis a lovely structured poem as well.
    the word "Then" in the first stanza, second to last line, should have a lowercase "t" since it is the continuation of the sentence of the previous line. hope to see more.
    oh yes, and you're another one of my faves. this was so wonderful to read.
    JenFlynn
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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