great job surah!!! its rlly good i luv it, hell i understand wat u mean, i think alot of us have gone through the sme thing or at least something close to it and i al,most cried wen i read this is rememinded me of a personal experience it was really good
And so I sit here with a knife to my throat And all I am to you is just a mote ...a piece of nothing I slowly tie a rope aroundmy neck I can't live much longer I am a wreck ...Whats the point
... i like it . it has a very well environment . it makes me think inn every passage of what you wrote so keep on writing .. peace and love .. and take care! victor!
Wow. I'm sorry, but I can't think of anything that could make this better. I love it the way it is. It's so sad. The wording is great. Very creative. Great job
There's not a whole lot that I think could make this better. What kind of music are you intending to put this to? I have a Green Day type melody going through my head here...that could be way off, but I like this. It is a bit sad, but you did a great job of conveying feelings and it's something that a lot of people can relate to and understand. Your lyrics are good and encourage you to keep going. Great job! Candi
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its rlly good i luv it, hell i understand wat u mean, i think alot of us have gone through the sme thing or at least something close to it and i al,most cried wen i read this is rememinded me of a personal experience it was really good 