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    dots Submission Name: No Cluedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 702
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    Bytes: 1275



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       I'm just so angry.


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    dotsNo Cluedots
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    What the hell are you doing to me?
    I'm not the girl I was before,
    That innocent, optimistic, happy soul...
    She doesn't live here anymore.
    You stole her heart when you said "I love you."
    There went her innocence in a sigh.
    You took her soul when you walked out the door,
    Stole her smile when you said goodbye.
    Now all that's left is me
    And that little bit of you.
    I need more than we have now,
    I want more than what we do.
    I don't want to be the one you come to
    When all you want is a piece of ass.
    I want to be the one who wakes up beside you.
    I want a love that's gonna last.
    I want your eyes to light up when you see me.
    I want to be the one who makes you smile.
    Oh, wait, I already do...
    So why is she the one having your child?
    I'm so sick of pretending not to feel.
    I'm so tired of being who I am.
    I hate how you can make me love you with a smile
    And you just don't give a damn.
    You make me feel like you still love me
    Every time that I'm with you.
    Then you go home to your girlfriend
    And she doesn't have a fucking clue.




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 12:00:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sounds to me that you have fallen in love with a boy who is like amazing and he is all you want but he has a girlfriend but still tells you he has feelings for you and everytime he tells you that its like a little glimps of hope and you think it might finally work but realy all he is doing is playing with your heart ... I know the feeling i been goin threw the same thing for a year its reallyt hard to deal with but i think you express your true feelings about the situration nicely in this poem
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds to me that you have fallen in love with a boy who is like amazing and he is all you want but he has a girlfriend but still tells you he has feelings for you and everytime he tells you that its like a little glimps of hope and you think it might finally work but realy all he is doing is playing with your heart ... I know the feeling i been goin threw the same thing for a year its reallyt hard to deal with but i think you express your true feelings about the situration nicely in this poem
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      i felt the anger and love in this one.. there is nothing better than having those two emotions in a piece together.. it really makes it worth reading and you did it well.. im sorry you feel that way..
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it i felt your anger in every word and i felt as though i couldve written it myself. i love your wording and the flow of the poem it adds to the power and brings your messege to life. i really can't pin point my favorite part of it but if i had to it be in the middle i guess i felt that way beofre and it was refreashing to read it. i love it. oh adn apart formt he poem i'm sry your feeling that way for any reason it sucks i just got myself outta those feelings.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great...what I love about your poetry is your ability to rhyme throughout the entire thing...I just cannot do that...a free verse chik I would say...but this was awesome and I think that it is great that she really has no clue.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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