i read the other two you mentioned as well they were good but i like this one the most it just seems to flow together smoothly and is well written it gave me a strong sense of being completely lost in an extremely familiar place like a ghost that doesnt know its dead i dont know if thats anything close to what you were talking about but thats how i interpureted i really liked it though defenitly some creativity hear
True, a morbid take on things, but true. I can feel the chaos and confusion in the seeping out of the poem...I liked "Nourished on fodder of fear and lies". Tearstained can be one word, though. Good flow of words...A good piece, I like it!
the way it ends is very definite and solid. 'A soul crying out leaves the body behind' But also it ends almost as it started. 'A soul crying out from deep within' It seems indicative of an equality between the ending and beginning. One tells where it came from and the other tells where it is going. Excellent work! Cara