Wow. You know, I could hear this as a responsive reading. Like, one person reads the first part, then another the second part, then the first the third part, et cetera. It's beautiful to see how each description fits with the next, and I know it's not about lovers, but it sounds like even in all those sins, they are amazingly synchronized, a perfect match. Maybe it's just me, my head works in an odd little way. Anyway, I enjoyed reading it, even though I didn't really understand the first stanza (about rage) very well.
If I may suggest something... you could change the word "shaped" in the part talking about "his curse" because you already used it in the one about "his rage". If you had intentionally repeated it, perhaps it would have looked better if you made it pop up in the other stanzas as well. But, to me, it looked like a little mishap. I don't know what word to suggest, the one you used fit so well, but it just looks worn when you use it twice.
Anyway, I hope I was of some help. Thank you lots for your read. Hope to see some more work from you soon.
PS. Is your pic Howl's Moving Castle? I'm dying to watch that movie!
I liked the religious overtones. It kind of reminded me of religion in a way, the single line stanzas... How do you kill an egotist? With indifference. How do you kill a god? by not believeing. What is the one sin that is completely unforgiveable in christianity? To say, There is no god. For once you say it and believe it and live it, you destroy god and are standing alone.
I liked the poem, even though I don't know what your intent was in writing this, but I do like the interpretations that present themselves while the reader tries to unravel the mystery. Very kewl work, keep on writing!