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    dots Submission Name: Petalsdots

    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this about 2 years ago in a journal and found it the other day... Its about that fear of falling too hard--I'm sure you all can relate!

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    Silken roses fall down from the heavens,
    And float gently on the breeze...
    While whispering winds so gently counsel me-
    "Just close your eyes and breathe".

    Tenderness sends shivers,
    Up and down my velvet skin...
    And Love keeps calling out to me-
    But Iím afraid to love again...

    My defenses fall too, as a petal falls from my lips
    Stained with wine and words unspoken,
    Down to your beautiful, crimson lips,
    and the angels softly whisper, "Let your heart be broken."

    Submitted on 2005-08-11 17:22:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm...I get to be the first to comment:) I really liked this. The flow was great as well. I liked the end...Just let your heart be broken...Seems like in falling in love, you already know the end...I liked it alot...

    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]

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