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    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this about 2 years ago in a journal and found it the other day... Its about that fear of falling too hard--I'm sure you all can relate!


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    Silken roses fall down from the heavens,
    And float gently on the breeze...
    While whispering winds so gently counsel me-
    "Just close your eyes and breathe".

    Tenderness sends shivers,
    Up and down my velvet skin...
    And Love keeps calling out to me-
    But Iím afraid to love again...

    My defenses fall too, as a petal falls from my lips
    Stained with wine and words unspoken,
    Down to your beautiful, crimson lips,
    and the angels softly whisper, "Let your heart be broken."




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 17:22:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is simply lovely. i am glad you unearthed it from your journal. this idea has been expressed by others before but never so gently or so beautifully. like the smile that shines through tears... it is that very special courage that many of us need. a very evocative piece of writing..and apparently quite effortless. wonderful. Thank you. J
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...very interesting...and thought provoking, though I feel that it may be the opposite that an angel would say, I think that if it was really love, it would heal the heart...cuz like you said, the heart is already broken. Sounds more like a lack of trust issue rather fear of falling in love, anyone can fall in love with someone, ya know...but to whole heartedly trust...thats the big test, and that test has no final question or final answer, ya know? But, thats just what I get out of it. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe the 'angel' is couseling you to step out on faith and risk heartbreak to find love; any other interpretation would seem naive. This was very quiet and composed, nearly as soft as the rose petal you imagine falling from your lips. An excellent vision of the dilemma of trust, faith and human emotion. I don't think I've read anything quite so hushed in a long time.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      No regrets is basically the message I'm getting from this poem. To be honest, I like it for it's blunt disguise. It's like your telling us to give it our all in a way where if we didn't we would really miss out on something beautiful.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by mandycandygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, what terrific images! Nice work here; I love the flower and angel images and the gentle tone of this.

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Great use of imagry and metaphors Hmm.. I have to say I did enjoy this poem I really felt where you were coming from
    And it all kinda unraveled itself to me like a story it was a good read no real errors any where and I completely understood the situation.By the way I'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm. . . so soft, so smooth sooooo easy to read!griping sensual imagery that enticed my mind and had me picturing the fall of the rich coloured rose petals . . .absolutely lovely! About the conrtent - baby im sure u'l find alot of people relating

    Well Done

    Keep spreading the love
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]


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