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    dots Submission Name: Our Nations True Frustrationdots
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    Author: poppa jon
    ASL Info:    44 /m /N.E.
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 34/46/8
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Rant/Satire
    Total Views: 888
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       There is not much else to say .Sorry if offended any of you i am just sick and tired of burying our brothers and sisters for a cause that could be best served HERE! Thanks JON


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    dotsOur Nations True Frustrationdots
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    The number one causation
    that affects our mighty nation,
    Our leaders mental masturbation,
    Created by his moral constipation
    His primary occupation
    is to disrupt other nations
    as they struggle for salvation
    Just ask any Haitian.
    Or even our own reservations.
    There you'll find frustration.

    Sitting Bull and Crazyhorse ,Chief Joseph
    Were a few .
    Oh ,how many lies we've heard
    from others just like you!
    Whats done is done it has to be !
    There is no one left to beat!
    Perhaps he'll bring our soldiers home
    to patrol our very streets.
    They will surely come for me
    for speaking with dissent !
    Yet i really do not care!
    FUCK this President!!!!!!!
    Liars ,thieves and Bullies
    he just makes a call!
    I will speak just how i feel.
    And i say fuck them all!!!




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 21:27:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW! I loved it! I hate Bush too, he's completely full of [censored] and I agree with every bit you said! Just love it! I like the whole "mental masturbation" bit, you hit it right on!
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Rhayne O_Reilly | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not going to go into political views here, but I will say that this was a good write-all politics aside. Your aggrevation was clear and concise and you used some strong words that I really liked..."mental masturbation". That was very interesting.
    I have my own views on the war, but I completely respect how you feel. I must give credit where credit is due, this was a great write!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice metaphors, well said. Your feeling are concise. It has a nice ring and flow that draws you into and through it.

    I feel that more people need to be this honest about their feelings. These voices need to be heard.

    Thanks for going there.
    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      AWSOME! [censored] BUSH! lol... i loved this..i really did... damn... i talk [censored] about bush too...ha ha... hey when they come for you.. i wont mind getting aressted with you to... you can go to my page and see a song from tupac...i dedicated it to Bush... oh yeah and at the end there is this funny joke..its my fave..lol...i loved this...
    KAY
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]


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