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my razor's name is jean


Author: poetry chica
ASL Info:    17/f/usa
Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93 /98 /34
Words: 124
Class/Type: Misc /Cutting or Mutilation
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kinda retarded but i guess i just like to personalize the things that hurt me


my razor's name is jean



My rubberband is Jerry
and mt razor's name is Jean
they don't get along too well
because razors can get mean

razors are territorial, you see
and Jerry moved in on Jean's turf
she didn't take it too well
and blessed Jerry with a curse

She'd follow him around
Until he failed to do his job
And then she'd spring into action
Like a boy pouncing on a frog

She'd do her job well
she had skill and expertise
Jean would slice the skin wide open
like a knife through warm cheese

And then the blood would flow
and the puddle would begin to grow
and it'd grow and grow and grow...
until there was no more blood to flow




Submitted on 2005-08-11 22:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this one.. cool imagry too :) about the rubberband thing. is that the thing where you put the rubber band on and when u feel like cutting you snap it? i've tried that.. never succusfull *sp* though.. good luck w/ it if i'm anywhere close
its a good poem..
danielle
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
  nicely done, simple yet, not idiotic. maybe it's best understood by someone who understands what you're trying to convey, or at least feel they understand, than in such a case it takes on a whole different, deeper meaning.
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked it all up until you said kinfe slicing through warm cheese and i desipsed the last stanza. but other than that it was okay. not one of your best but still okay.

Take care
Jesi~
| Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
  I must admit the cheese thing was painfully random. I actually think it took away from the poem. But the last stanza was my favorite. I have great respect for anyone who can make their feelings rhyme. Great piece.

Naver alone: Haley
| Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]


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