i like this one.. cool imagry too :) about the rubberband thing. is that the thing where you put the rubber band on and when u feel like cutting you snap it? i've tried that.. never succusfull *sp* though.. good luck w/ it if i'm anywhere close its a good poem.. danielle
nicely done, simple yet, not idiotic. maybe it's best understood by someone who understands what you're trying to convey, or at least feel they understand, than in such a case it takes on a whole different, deeper meaning.
I must admit the cheese thing was painfully random. I actually think it took away from the poem. But the last stanza was my favorite. I have great respect for anyone who can make their feelings rhyme. Great piece.