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    dots Submission Name: my razor's name is jeandots
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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 841
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    Description:
       kinda retarded but i guess i just like to personalize the things that hurt me


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    dotsmy razor's name is jeandots
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    My rubberband is Jerry
    and mt razor's name is Jean
    they don't get along too well
    because razors can get mean

    razors are territorial, you see
    and Jerry moved in on Jean's turf
    she didn't take it too well
    and blessed Jerry with a curse

    She'd follow him around
    Until he failed to do his job
    And then she'd spring into action
    Like a boy pouncing on a frog

    She'd do her job well
    she had skill and expertise
    Jean would slice the skin wide open
    like a knife through warm cheese

    And then the blood would flow
    and the puddle would begin to grow
    and it'd grow and grow and grow...
    until there was no more blood to flow




    Submitted on 2005-08-11 22:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this one.. cool imagry too :) about the rubberband thing. is that the thing where you put the rubber band on and when u feel like cutting you snap it? i've tried that.. never succusfull *sp* though.. good luck w/ it if i'm anywhere close
    its a good poem..
    danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely done, simple yet, not idiotic. maybe it's best understood by someone who understands what you're trying to convey, or at least feel they understand, than in such a case it takes on a whole different, deeper meaning.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it all up until you said kinfe slicing through warm cheese and i desipsed the last stanza. but other than that it was okay. not one of your best but still okay.

    Take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      I must admit the cheese thing was painfully random. I actually think it took away from the poem. But the last stanza was my favorite. I have great respect for anyone who can make their feelings rhyme. Great piece.

    Naver alone: Haley
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]


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