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    dots Submission Name: Spin for the Skydots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 893
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1783



    Description:
       As a birthday present to Jeff, the entire youth group soaked him with water balloons. Colleen, Sarah, Molly and I decided to soak him from above. So we went on the roof....it was amazing.


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    dotsSpin for the Skydots
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    The stars were glittering and surfacing
    with the sky still a brilliant pink.
    Jeff stood at the church’s brick wall
    on his birthday,
    as we assaulted him with water balloons.
    Our grins were fierce and jubilant,
    our faces dripping with vindicated tears
    made by his neon cannon.
    It was our only chance,
    a once in a lifetime opportunity
    so we devised a plan.
    Two of us carried the water,
    the other two carried the ladder.
    We called for help and Jake held it,
    sturdy and safe against the ground
    as the four of us
    crawled slowly towards the sky.
    The ladder jounced under our weight,
    our hands shook in exhilaration
    and terror of what might occur.
    But only a few more steps,
    and then the heavens and earth met
    at our anxious fingertips.
    A brief sprint across the rooftop
    and then we make it rain
    on our supreme enemy of adolesence,
    as though our bodies were stormy clouds
    and our tears the rain of justice.
    As Jeff ran into the safety of the church,
    we spun in circles on the roof.
    We twirled and ran and lifted our hands
    to the the skies in gratitude.
    Our feet ached and our knees scraped,
    but we wished to never come down.
    What a life it would be
    to spin for the sky forever.
    Yet the night was coming to an end.
    Again the ladder was held by Jake below,
    and we shuffled our way back
    to the consecrated and sodden ground,
    feeling as though it was
    our greatest and most intimate enigma.
    But what a moment it had been
    to feel on top of the world
    with the most natural high there is.




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 00:10:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is a good poem. it has a nice rhythm and everything. It was too long for me cause as i was reading it, i slowly started thinking about something else. I'm not trying to say it was bad, i just got a short attention spand when it come to reading. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Freaky DA | [ Reply to This ]
      This one has a beautiful flow and the rhyming seems very natural.

    All and all this sure is coming from the heart of a 16 year old , sweet, happy and cheerful .

    I liked it
    good read
    Trish
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      This just was soo right it just had amazing flow it felt good to read and although it was long i never lost my place and for me thats hard to do very nice work cant wait to read more
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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