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    dots Submission Name: Time To Seedots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       This is for a friend's father. I hate the man. I truly feel this way towards him. I truly will do anything for her.


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    dotsTime To Seedots
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    You tell her sheís a whore,
    you say she will never amount to anything
    You love to be the master of her life,
    trying to lead her towards an endless pool of emptiness.

    You tell her what she canít do,
    all the time, forever unwavering
    You say she is a bitch,
    and she is a walking billboard for sex.

    Well Iíve got news for you, my pathetic little friend,
    you are the true piece of shit that she can never sink to.
    You are the one who will end up an empty shell of a man,
    and I will help you realize this.

    Because you donít seem to care, or even see,
    what I will do for her, what I will do to you for her.
    You are unable to comprehend the depths of hell I will lead you to,
    to simply see that you pay for your treatment of such a beautiful soul.

    I will make you realize this,
    I will make you feel all the agony that this world can offer you.
    All the animosity that I have to offer.
    You will see soon, it wonít take long.

    I will show you all of what she truly is,
    and everything you say she is and in reality is not.
    I will show you this before you reach the end of the tunnel,
    but Iím sorry to tell you there wont be a light at the end of it.

    No, all you will see is the depths of the hate you have so carelessly inflicted,
    all of the tortures I have so carefully invented.
    You will see and then you will no longer be,
    This is a warning, if you do not heed you will see.

    And she will no longer have to.




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 01:26:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey there! It's been a while and thought I would come over and see what you are up to. This is a very powerful poem. Nicely written and expressed indeed. It is a shame that some parents can be so abusive this way. There is no excuse for it and it is wonderful that you stand up for your friend. I am sure knowing he says these things just eats you up inside and I hope that your expression in this poem helped you vent a bit. Hope you are well. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. Honestly you didnt even need to really tell us what it was about. You let it flow through so good in your poetry without even coming close to saying it. And like that you told us what it was about. This is really great. sounds like you really care about her alot. And I hope you do show him what he is doing because I hate people like that. That think they have control over someone when they really dont. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a friend like that. Everytime I even act sad or lonely, she's like, "Who do I kill?" I have to laugh at her because I think she really would. The write was great. Yeah, you didn't have to discribe it at all. But it's ok. The flow was sort of nonexistent but I get the feeling most of your work is like that.(so is mine) But yeah, I like to hear the other side of it. Nice work.

    Never alone: Haley
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]


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