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    dots Submission Name: The Price We Paydots
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    Author: dreamweaver
    ASL Info:    28/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 1022/443/42
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 1273
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    Bytes: 750



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       I've been watching the news and listening to people blame others for the war in Iraq...I hate this war, however I don't believe the blame is being placed in the right spot.

    I realize this could stir up a ton of political views and that's fine...all I ask is that we not lose sight of these men and women risking and in some cases losing their lives to keep us safe.
    These are my heroes.


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    dotsThe Price We Paydots
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    Watching the news,
    anger spews from lips tainted with hate.
    A mother mourning her loss,
    the reality of an unfortunate cause.

    It's time for people to be held accountable-
    the finger is being pointed in the wrong direction.

    When I lay my head down at night,
    I sleep in peace.
    People give their lives selflessly
    for strangers such as you and me.

    For freedom,
    there is a hefty cost.
    I beg of you,
    don't allow these men and women die in vain.

    I will stand beside you,
    mourning your loss.
    My heart cries for you.
    It's for this stranger's bravery,
    I can live my life comfortably.




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 06:29:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very good Candi, I can't believe to new fav's addition in one day. I really do like this, I hope that some day I'll be able to reach your level of writing or at least somewhere near.

    I truely felt that this was a fitting tribute to soldiers fighting the war in Iraq. Often times that don't great the respect they deserve.
    This was very well needed and glad you shared your opinion with us.

    Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for shraing.

    Your friend Jason.
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you for the POSITVE influence you have made for our troops sake!i am in aggreement with you 100% on this.this is eactly the way i feel about our soldiers over there in Iraq. they atleast deserve our support.
    i wrote a song(not just to promote it ) called My America, which is about deriring to make it back home to kiss the American soil. check it out and let me know what you think. it is recorded if you'd like to hear it also.

    thanks again for the beautiful tribute to our troops. God bless you!
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      I totally agree with your point of view in this write
    We must remember those whole have dedicated there Life to fighting for us people they dont even know
    I admire a soldiers bravery and there strong sense of ethics
    Very well written
    Thank You for sharing this
    Your Friend
    Ron

    And Thank You for the wonderful comments you recently gave me
    I am truly humbled
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      IT's true because of someone elses bravery we are able to sleep at night. Including the man who put them in danger. He sleeps at home with his wife while man fight a war that he so much desires... good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by mandy dupuis | [ Reply to This ]
      a very honest and not too political(which always confuses me anyway these days)view.In a world that seems to have gone mad you portray you unselfishness and gratitude at being able to sleep at night while also feeling for those who have lost.I found this piece very touching and the last stanza is the best one for me as even though these people are doing there job,it is indeed a very brave one and we have to be thankful for that.god bless them and one day hopefully the whole world can live in peace
    graham
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really good write. I'm glad to see something like this on this site. We should all be proud and thankful for those who fight to keep us in freedom and.. as you say.. the fact that we can sleep at night in peace...and have a restful mind at day.. living in the comfort that we have come to take for granted, never stopping to realize, or be thankful to those who sacrficed.
    A very good read.
    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice one Candi. i agree with the sentiments here telling them "do not let them die in vain"
    it is nice to honor the soldier and to look at the war objectively as possible. allthough im against war i do find the dynamics of war itself fascinating. the strategies, chain of command, missions, looking at battlefield maps, etc etc. nice write Candi, mike
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot. You do an excellent job of staying above the politics and focusing on what's important.

    I'm opposed to the war but I understand the soldiers' reasons for being in the military. It's just a shame and a waste that we're losing the best and brightest for something like this...

    Nice work.

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is such an INSPIRING piece, especially when these COURAGEOUS SOULS are not being acknowleged and its rather unfortunate for their mother...Iraq and US mothers who are losing their children. Its not fair for either one of them. However this is a beautiful tribute to our heroes...I loved the flow...my fav verseI will stand beside you,
    mourning your loss.
    My heart cries for you.
    It's for this stranger's bravery,
    I can live my life comfortably"...This is such a heart warming piece...Thanks for acknowledging them...Be happy...Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you did a very good job focusing on the soldiers instead of the feelings on one side or the other. Personally, I believe if we don't keep the war on their soil, they will bring it to us again as they did on 9-11.

    Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write candi coated dreamy weaver! Its such an opinionated thing that war over there, but I agree with Gadfly...if we dont take it to them, they will bring it to us, ya know? But the loss of life is a tragic price on both sides. Thanks for sharing. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Love this! I definately agree with you. We are blaming the wrong people. If Iraq didn't want us there, we would have more casaulties than we do. I'm not against the war there for I do have family fighting over there and they tell me they are proud to be fighting oversees. It's always nice to read something like this. We may not always like the war, but we have to be strong for those over there. Love the poem.
    take care,
    ~steph
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by HurtDeepDown | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well stated indeed! You have touched a sensitive spot with me on this one! I feel deeply for the families of our fallen heroes! Every life lost is tragic! I cant understand why we are still in Iraq. We cant police their world forever! They dont value life like we do. They will continue to kill each other until the end of days and our men and women shouldn't be dying right along with them! My dad was killed in the Army when I was only 4 years old leaving my mom and me without him. I deeply understand the impact that it has forever on these families. I do understand that we need to defend against terrorism but we did what we needed to do in Iraq, the leader is in jail, so what the f*ck are we still dying there for?? You have done a wonderful job with this poem Candi! A truly heartfelt sentiment! Well done! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Candi, I thought you did a wonderful job of redirecting attention to the cost in lives of men and woman who put there lives on the line to protect our freedom. Whether you believe that this war is about that or not these soldiers are doing their part to protect us. One of the great shames of the Veitnam war was the way in which our fighting men and women became the issue rather than the politicians.

    You did a wonderful job of speaking for them!

    Very lovely piece!


    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      i didn't look at this peice for the political "who blames who" i really loved this peice because of you dwelling (if thats the right word to use) on the fact that strangers who we don't even know, are fighting to let us sleep in peace. and i think that this was beautiful. my grandpa is a politician and a good man. he's one of the special ones... that one that actually fights for the good and not just for the economy... and he would love this too... so thank you.

    Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
      see, where I grew up. people are forced to go. some decide to go on free will, but others are forced are end up in prison.
    two sides to many stories. if their sons was forced to go then i can see why parents complain but if their sons decided free will, then parents should not.
    great piece for a convertation for a friendly topic.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, when you put it that way! It does go unnoticed what these men and women are doing for our sakes, and it is too late to play the blame game. I thank you wrote this tastefully. And you made it a poem according to your feelings without shoving it on the reader. Great flow and beautiful message. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Very very nicely done, Candi, and who is going to argue with you? You got it all right!

    I would call it "unfortunate cause" that's just beautiful, and there's lots of wonderful lines in this.
    It dbe the best write on the conflict that I've read so far.

    Well done

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      First off thank you for your comments on my nations frustration piece. Politics are always aside for me any way I was just venting.
    This piece is very good. It ,to me, Reflects the selfless sacrifice of the few for the greater good of the many. If there is any good to be found.
    And how true it is that i, too, sleep in comfort.
    Alass i do believe the "unfortunate cause " to be the greed of the few at this point.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by poppa jon | [ Reply to This ]
      First off thank you for your comments on my nations frustration piece. Politics are always aside for me any way I was just venting.
    This piece is very good. It ,to me, Reflects the selfless sacrifice of the few for the greater good of the many. If there is any good to be found.
    And how true it is that i, too, sleep in comfort.
    Alass i do believe the "unfortunate cause " to be the greed of the few at this point. POPPA JON
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by poppa jon | [ Reply to This ]
      i am very against the war myself. but these soldiers didnt all chose to be there, its their assignment and their duty as soldiers for the united states of america.i understand your point of view and enjoyed readingyour poem. im sure many people who have lobved ones fighting or dieing will appreciate this piece of work of they get their hands on it.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice write here! and i dont like this war much at all, and i agree with you about blaming the wrong people, but i will never forget what these people are doing for us, whether or not i approve of the war. its a good thing you keep these in mind.
    -steph
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      i find it very difficult to trust politcians, but i do not think we can ever thank enough those who have already given their lives and those who continue to risk their lives so that we can continue to have a comfortable life. You have expressed this very sympathetically and very intelligently, deviod of melodrama and sentimentality. thank you
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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