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    dots Submission Name: Self Lovedots

    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Spawned from recurring habitual behavior

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    dotsSelf Lovedots

    Abused and used by calloused hands
    Pleasure leads to pain
    Held within a grasp unplanned
    The torment starts again

    Shameful eyes infused with rage
    Gaze upon the waste
    Where heart and mind did thus engage
    On that which once was chaste

    Feelings of remorse ensue
    Condemning all self love
    Search in vain for any clue
    To somehow rise above

    This savage war goes on each day
    a struggle to resist
    When tenacity and strength decay
    Temptation still exists

    Submitted on 2005-08-12 08:37:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow very emotional piece. Cant wait to read more of your work.
    I can relate so much.
    When tenacity and strength decay
    Temptation still exists was my favorite part.
    Keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      hay man, youve got some serious knowlege, you should use you voice to voice these words. I think you would really benefit others if you used this tallent to tackle other taboo issues of younger society. really interesting work. Got a kick from the title line Feelings of remorse ensue
    Condemning all self love
    thats some top class funny [censored] man. but keep up the self love because someones got to keep heff in business and if you stop wacken he starts loosin money, yeah, keep it up,
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Siriquelle | [ Reply to This ]

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