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    dots Submission Name: freestyle monkey rapdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Happy
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1786



    Description:
       this is pretty much a freestyle setup...just started writing and this is what came out...hope u likes it


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    dotsfreestyle monkey rapdots
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    I'm gonna listen to what you say, but when you done I'm gonna break
    I'm gonna twist your neck, and peirce your heart with a stake
    don't test my nerves because I'm on edge
    I'm tryin not to loose head
    I don't wanna do no stupid shit, but if you make me then I must,
    with my ak47, so many bite the dust
    I know what we decided and I know what we discussed
    But there's a lack of something in my heart called trust
    I don't know why but I like it that way
    you kill less people when you act that way
    but I"m'a kill bout 17 people today
    run up in the mall and they all run away
    just listen to what it is that I got to say
    the man in the mirror bout to throw u away
    now theres a shank in your eye, is that okay?
    thats enough shit that rhymes with A
    how about shit that rhyme with B, okay?
    I"m an abberant king and that's how its gonna be
    the man in the mirror Be smokin on the tree
    and he do it in the open for you all to see
    the green goblin gottem choking don't call the police
    whatever you be doin I'm'a make it cease
    make all the lovely women show the double D's
    you know they all wanna be her and Me
    Don't really kknow what else to say
    so now I'm gonna quit if that's okay
    I'll leave you with last few rhythm and rhymes
    that means you got just a few more lines
    don't smoke weed because it's all for me
    that's how god meant for shit to be
    so anybody out the smokin a tree
    put that shit out, told u it's all for me

    THE MOTHA FUCKIN END




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 12:42:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ...very ..weird..good message...but again very weird.not my stylr i hate rap myself but you won an award so..yeah...but again very weird and very different title
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm..weed...why cant we smoke it no more..its for you..pooop...lol! i like this i liked this line the best:

    "thats enough [censored] that rhymes with A
    how about [censored] that rhyme with B, okay?"

    nicely done...another fav

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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