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    dots Submission Name: Water the Trees Mandots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is open to interpretation...I am actually really interested to know what you guys think...not sure that I like it but it's always worth putting out there.


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    dotsWater the Trees Mandots
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    And what is man?
    to be reduced to such emotion
    constantly changing
    humid tears and raging anger
    from the day that you are born
    until you are head first, diving into pits of black

    and you yell out with pride
    you derive pleasure from every soul you step on
    every piece of soil you pack into the ground
    no man is better than death

    and what are you?
    and what am I?
    to be reduced to soil
    from the labor and the fruit of your mother
    to the dirt you wash from your boots

    and yet you yell with pride
    I say kneel down
    and maybe water the trees
    feed the soil
    it's what you will be




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 13:33:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i really liked this peice. have u ever seen the poetry readdings they have sometimes on t.v.? they read them so intensly and dont really have pauses or anything and they are all really deep...well that is how i read this one and it sounds really really great when u read it like that if u havent u might wanna read it like that. um..im not really good with interpretations but i kinda see this peice as a "we (people) arent better than the earth or anything else because in the end we all become one" thats how i see this peice. again GREAT peice.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      "and you yell out with pride
    you derive pleasure from every soul you step on
    every piece of soil you pack into the ground
    no man is better than death"

    Such wonderful images. I really can picture some triumphant, violent man yelling with pleasure at the pain of others.

    I really like this a lot. It puts things in perspective.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Wino | [ Reply to This ]


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