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    dots Submission Name: abuseddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This one is directed at the parentals. So yea I guess the purpose of this one is for you guys to relate and tell me what you think.

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    dotsabuseddots
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    you question my sanity
    rip me from the very seams of my mind
    the apple doesn't fall far from the tree
    but it's sometimes hard to find

    you let me lay here and rot
    you hold your breath as a result of my decay
    a reflection from the mirror
    but you sometimes can't see my face

    this glass is always breaking
    pieces fall and my skin is ripped
    a wound you blame on my insanity
    but it's your blood that falls from each cut on my wrist

    you question my morals
    they were washed away with this bit of wine
    you say I'm too drunk to consider
    but you abused the life right out of my mind




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      parents are abusive when they don't think they are. honestly the smallest remark that one of them makes can tear the heart out of you. i don't know what to say really because all i do is block them out anymore. not everything is their fault though, pressure builds from everything that happens in a day and sometimes you just can't help but try to find someone to blame. just keep your head up for now, and stay away from sharp objects.
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by bluecrane | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I actually thought it was like a parent abusing a child. (been through that) but I have also gone through personal abuse. I Sometimes just take the blade and slice it down my arm. I've almost died. but anyways,
    "this glass is always breaking
    pieces fall and my skin is ripped
    a wound you blame on my insanity
    but it's your blood that falls from each cut on my wrist"
    so much imagery and emotion put into these lines. I love how you say its your blood that falls. It throws the guilt and hate in their faces. Even though spitting in a parents face releases more stress. Though most parents who care are gonna make your life hell until your about 17. i know this because my sisters life sucked until about a month ago. she will be 17 next month. then again we also had an abusive mother for awhile too. but anyways overall nice imagery and i love how everything was written and portrayed here.

    take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      hey welcome back and wow what a post
    i guess you no i am a father of 5 and grandad for my age i have seen to many things. i grew up with the abusive generation School you used to get strapped by the teacher for chewing gum and then kicked around at home born in the sixties was the generation of anger I think people had children just to push them away, alot of the people i knew took their abuse out on their siblings Me i could never harm any child physical or mentally mine or someone elses
    even though i only see my children once a year i hold them in my heart and respect them and their ways of thinking
    i liked your post brought back alot of emotions
    well done as far as your discription asking for a point of view i hope this helps Did not mean to ramble on
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem. It was raw and heartfelt. I liked the way you made the parents see if they is damage, they are to blame to when it comes to the child. And that being critical, that don't get anyone anywhere. Great job. I found another fav.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This was absolutely fantastic. Well done you. this came out of nowhere and hit me hard thanx for that. The whole concept is great and the portrayal even better.
    Thanks Again
    x
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      Imagery was wonderful. Dark but wonderful. I think that parents should read their childrens poems. It gives them an idea of what their children are going through and what they might be doing wrong. Nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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