i know where this poem comes from and im sorry you lost her. i liked this format it was very different but the end just went to single lines but it is all good. death isnt the funnest thing to deal with i know thsi from yeah. this was a good poem it shows just enough detail to get a point of absenance out and pain from your loss. you should put in a hind of what your mom did to give a bigger ugg kinda out look to it to give a fuller rush of pain and overwhelming numb that you went through.
im sorry she is gone and i hope you feel better about her soon. hang in there
I don't find it rude that you frankly don't care to change this peice. I find that I don't want you to change it even if you did care. It is so well written and I feel an emotion I can't quit describe when I read it. I'm putting this on my favorites list and I believe I will read it over and over again. -Sageeriol
there is a lot to this poem that I probably just don't get .. to do with the last
Laid to rest
Hitting the cement- Grace-
Lillie covering her heart
Shattering- Glass flies-
Put a nickel in her hand
The world is stained-
So she can cross the river of Styx
I understand that it has to do with death and shattering the glass flies? maybe I do get more now really looking at it I wouldn't change anything just maybe put a little brief message in the description for clueless people like me lol.. don't they put coins on the eyes toowhen they die ee there is a little bit of cluelessness going on lol.. anyway I get it a little.. nice description and if your happy with it that is all that matters.. thanks for sharing Peace! Penny
That was a fast poem with a strong message... I think I got the message... but if you could PM on it... anyway... wonderful, I really liked and wouldn't change a thing... not that I would make you change a thing anyway... I mean that is a total diss on a person's soul, because that is what poetry is in a way, a reflectino of the soul... THNX
i really like this.and im sooo sorry about everything thats going on. i wish i could help sum how, but i know the only thing i might be able to do is maybe bake u brownies but im not sure that would help. wonderful peom tho.