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Author: Deep Ace Thinks
ASL Info:    35/M/ Spring, TX
Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 124 /190 /60
Words: 61
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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FINALLY!!!! A POST!!!!! I THOUGHT IT WAS GONE FOREVER...THEN, A FRIEND INSPIRES....THANKS SOOOO MUCH!!! AND shhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!


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morning star falls beneath an interlude of blue
burning away to the other side.

worlds turn, hearts yearn,

as her thoughts succomb to the ebbing tide.

fleeting moments captured by her stealthy pen,

forever etched for the world to taste.

rememberances caught between now...and then,

no word or deed is left to waste.





Submitted on 2005-08-12 16:15:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow! This was so good! I loved everything about it. The flow, the imagery, the way you combined the lady writing with the elements of outside her home. This was truly a good write. And I enjoyed reading it. Good job.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  You are a gem friend! I thank you for your thoughts and swami advice and for being such a good friend! You Rock! It's never gone when you're damn good like you! Have a great weekend! Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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