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    dots Submission Name: Half-Hearted Paradisedots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsHalf-Hearted Paradisedots
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    I'm in a place called paradise,
    But I left a piece of me behind.
    The souls around me tell me
    That I am still whole
    A single, complete entity.
    But that is incredibly untrue,
    How am I whole
    When I left my heart on earth.
    The skies would be so much brighter,
    The sights that much more beautiful,
    They do not understand
    They proclaim I am too young.
    But I know what I feel.
    I know that its some form of love
    And wheather they like it or not,
    I will keep on loving him




    Submitted on 2005-08-12 20:54:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with the previous comments. I also thought that this was an effortless poem to write as it I'm guessing it just flowed from you. Thats what REALLY being in love does for you when you sit down and try to capture an instance, an emotion or a feeling. Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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