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    dots Submission Name: Who would have thought?dots

    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 342
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       who would have thought.........

    that so much shit would have been stirred up
    but oh well... i'm gonna have fun and keep writing...

    I'm tired of hiding what i feel.....
    I joined this site because I kinda thought it would be cool to let other people read what I write... and my brother said that there was constructive critisism which is find with me...because that is the best way to go....
    you will only get better....
    so this might be my last write on here.....
    im just sick of the bullshit

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    dotsWho would have thought?dots

    Who would have thought somebody would try to censor little ole me
    telling me theres another way to say pussy.......

    Some little pussy told me not to use the word
    it seems I'm a wanna be, I'm to absurd
    So who's the pussy?
    Me or him?
    Who is with the ladies when the lights dim?
    People say I strike an overbearing fear
    but it's only people talking who easily shed tears
    All these critics, and LOOKIE LOOKIE,
    I'm still here
    They say I'm woman bashing and hating queers
    only because my lyrics are truth, ghetto sincere
    causing a riot of "peace" writers
    just because I use my pen, to show I'm a fighter
    Who would have known?
    I would have caused this much drama
    Who would have thought?
    I'd have such bad karma
    Staring in the mirror wondering whats next
    Wondering if people will laugh or cry
    at the shit I say in my next text
    Well I'm living this fucking shit up
    Hoping the haters never shut up
    Cause my pens ink will never run dry
    even after I'm gone, people will write my way
    speaking the truth, about why solemn had to die

    What is said next is only the truth........

    Now that shits out
    Who's the next fool high in the clouds?
    Saying they wanna question the kid
    questioning what i've wrote and did
    I'm gonna tell you the truth
    you gonna be lost like ruth
    in boston, my empire is from N.O to Austin
    If you don't like the ghetto or ray rhyme
    and talking of living the live and sad crime
    you need to read somebodys else stuff
    cause I'm blunt and my words are rough
    I aint here to write to somebody elses likes
    I'm gonna do what I want, like Wanda Sykes
    So if you dont like it, it aint nothing personal
    Again I'm only gonna speak whats true
    So don't read nothing else,
    and take this with you
    Have a nice day and FUCK YOU

    Submitted on 2005-08-12 23:14:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I dont' think you should give up and leave just because someone didn't like what you said. Nobody's perfect and not everyone will like what you say, but is that really a reson to give up? I think all the way around, you should always say what's on your mind, free speach, and no one can censore that. You mention you are a fighter, well... fight and don't give up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
      No offense, but everytime someone criticizes you, you reward him or her with some sort of comeback. Maybe if you weren't so defensive, people wouldn't fling crap at you. I think some people do it to see what you'll do. Giving up just lets those people win though. Seriously, you should ask a veteran of this site how many arguments I've had here (because I'd be willing to bet that I've had more than anyone else here), but I won't give people the satisfaction of making me quit. Anyway, these are just my thoughts, and it's your choice, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      mike said it perfectly, do not let this [censored] get to you. don't let the haters tht you've done so well with this whole time bump you off now. you're givin them exactly what they want by leaving. i think that you should take it in stride and be proud as hell that you got under so many people's skin. writing all about getting a reaction, wether it be positive or negative. let the negative define you, but never defeat you. holla atcha boi~P
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      You are definately keeping the volume as loud as it can go. Keep that [censored] up, allow those people to keep on hearing you, it may not seem like it is sinking in but it is just with some people it takes a while. You leaving is like them winning. Do you want them yo win? I don't, there are going to be those people you despise everywhere! Ask your brother he knows too. You seem to look up to him alot, that is good. It is rather awkward with my brother, he is 29, and he for the most part looks up to me. I look up to the people that keep it real, no bull[censored]. I look up to those who are doing the right thing for the right reason. Well that was off the subject in some matter but, what I'm getting at is DON"T LEAVE HOMIE> you like to write and show peole what you write. that is what this site is about. Stop dwelling on the stupid [censored], look toward the good stuff.

    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      Great use of imagry and metaphors Hmm.. I have to say I did enjoy this poem I really felt where you were coming from
    And it all kinda unraveled itself to me like a story it was a good read no real errors any where and I completely understood the situation.By the way I'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      Considering I dont think there is anyone in this world that could ever actually censor your a*ss, I shall ignore the lil message you are sending and leave it at you made a point. How bout I just tell you how good your sh*t is - your emotion and feeling come through quite strong and your words...as always to the point & very visual...the words are reminders of a once - long ago self of mine that felt everyone just wanted to put down everything I did and I wrote some very angry pieces - non of which sounded as good as this, but did contain lots of cuss words and threats - you express your stronger emotions so much better than I ever have or ever will - I like this - despite your threat to be your last - we shall see
    Keep writing - I'm not through reading you
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      look...cade...dont loose what you like to do...just cuz theres hater...theres always gonna be haters...everywhere..sorry man...but its true..Your a great poet..one of the best ones i know..dont leave please...please...like rachel said..if your a fighter...fight...ok...dont let hater ruin your best skillz...we wanna hear what you have to say. and if they [censored]in dont liek ti [censored] them! they [censored] offs who have no idea what youve been through...cuz their so [censored]in perfect...well i think people with problems have more fun...and i have a hell of a good time..i let people know what i thinka bout them..what i feel...and u just need to keep writing and dont let people put you down...your a great writer...dont loose it...we love you

    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      They say I'm woman bashing and hating queers
    only because my lyrics are truth, ghetto sincere

    Cause my pens ink will never run dry
    even after I'm gone, people will write my way
    speaking the truth, about why solemn had to die

    i'm glad u told me ur not leaving. cuz i woulda been pissed. ur my angry buddy. the one who pisses everybody off with his "[censored] u " attitude. man i just sit back and laf when these biches tell u something cuz i know ur a battle rapper and u always got a punch line up ur sleeve and u shoot em off like bullets. we don't have enough MCs on here as it is. i'm glad ur here 2 stay. true soldiers never die marine. don't forget that shjt.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      They say I'm woman bashing and hating queers
    only because my lyrics are truth, ghetto sincere

    ...Ghetto sincere? I must admit that out of all of your... rap.. songs.. er.. whatever. I did like this one the best because it actually had rhythm. But your still not a poet and I am not going to pretend you are. I do not like the ghetto scene so I am going to stick with real poetry. I think I am the only person who thinks this, but I do not care. It's about time you get actual comments on this one that are true. I am very blunt. Sorry.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by SorrowfulMind | [ Reply to This ]

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