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    dots Submission Name: Cracked and Brokendots

    Author: Rhayne O_Reilly
    ASL Info:    17/F/ND
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 60/75/33
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       just came to me....dunno what I think of it for sure yet...thoughts?

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    dotsCracked and Brokendots

    A beautiful stone wall
    Perfect and flawless
    As time goes on
    The wall grows weary
    And beings to crack slowly
    A small, invisible line at first
    But as it puts up with weather, time,
    The crack widens
    And opens the heart of that stone wall
    Leaving it vulnerable to more cracks
    Some thing, some overwhelming
    Someone sees this old broken wall
    And begins the repair
    It's once again perfect and flawless
    Soon after a crack begins to form
    This wall is more fragile now than before
    It's cracks become deeper, more meaningful
    Until time finally crumbles it away
    No longer beautiful, perfect, or flawless
    An old pile of rubble
    Pieces of a stone wall, seemingly nothing
    Then the same someone comes along once again
    And sees this old forgotten pile of stone
    He soon realizes there's nothing to be don
    Placing the smallest piece in his pocket
    He walks away slowly
    Taking a part of that once sturdy wall with him
    Taking a part of the stone wall's heart and soul
    So it will never be forgotten or
    Left lonely with nothing but broken pieces
    It will always be somewhere
    Even when the rubble is spread across the distance
    It will be remembered by one tiny part of it
    Always. Forever.
    Never left alone as in it's life
    To crumble anymore
    That fragile piece will always be here
    A reminder to anyone who touches it
    A reminder that cracks eventually broke it down
    But also a remind of remembrance
    Of the love that's capable
    To repair loneliness

    Submitted on 2005-08-12 23:46:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very interesting piece, a giant metaphor for life?

    I like the way you use the wall, starting out perfect, then being slowly flawed with the passage of time. The repairer I imagine to be the love of your life?

    I'm very impressed with this, I loved it.

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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