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    dots Submission Name: A Burialdots

    Author: silent ryder
    ASL Info:    22/male/LA
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 11/16/4
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    dotsA Burialdots

    Welcome to the end
    Black clouds and thunder appear
    Rappers disappear

    Submitted on 2005-08-13 00:19:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      why rappers though? that is my only question.
    rappers will always be here. the other words are good though. The title goes very well with the concept you have here, but rappers are here to stay. ans stop rapping if you are wanting them gone,
    i don't like contridictions at all oh and who gives a [censored] how you write a haiku.

    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      hey I liked " Actions" better. Sorry! Did not quite understand what rappers had to do with the end. I know I'm new at understanding Haiku. So I hope I didnt offend you.
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! This one is good but I dunno what is up with the rappers at the end?? What is the significance of that? You have written some good haikus! So far I like them all! Not so sure about the last line in this one but hey, it's your write! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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