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    dots Submission Name: It All Falls Apartdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       My rent was late, my utilities due, my car broke down, my mom is injured, my grandmother sick...everything fell apart. Things like this hurt less when there's someone beside you to help.


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    It all falls apart when you're gone.
    I'm never sure of what to do.
    It seems my whole world was built around
    The concept of loving you.

    It all falls apart when you're gone.
    It feels like my life is a sham.
    I don't know how to live anymore.
    I'm not sure of who I am.

    It all falls apart when you're gone,
    The house, the car, my mind.
    Everything that was in perfect harmony dissolves.
    I'm left with nothing but a difficult time.

    It all falls apart when you're gone,
    And no one else knows how to fix it.
    The hours that pass are so full of desperation,
    That i suppose I might as well just quit.

    It all falls apart when you're gone.
    Now you're gone forever.
    As hard as I try, I find that I just can't
    Put my heart back together.




    Submitted on 2005-08-13 11:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      David Fletcher fixes everything...he fixes printers and can help me burn cd's and he is just a helpful lil fella. But sorry for you.Bye.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see how you realize that things would be easier to cope with if you were not alone and heartbroken by this man. I love the way you said things were bad, but they are worst without him around. It sounds like you are having that kind of month. I only hope and pray things look up for you. Great writing.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      man that just hit home so hard. the girl i loved more than anything in the world had to leave to live in another state and we didnt want to break up but we had to. i didnt have the money or resources to just drop everything and move and she HAD to go. since she left things seem to progressively get worse everyday. when she was here she would say "dont worry it'll be ok" and i knew it would be. hearing it over the phone is nothing compared to having it whispered in your ear y know? so all i can say is i loved the poem for the simple fact that it hit home. but everything in the poem seems so valid and full of heart which IS what makes it great. thanx for writing this.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]


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