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    dots Submission Name: Earth's Tickledots
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    Author: Uriel
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 73/81/25
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 782
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    dotsEarth's Tickledots
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    A vein of the earth,
    strolling through serenity.
    Witness me in meditation,
    nigrescent liquidity.
    Choir of ravens hyme,
    Mollifying melody.
    willow leaves groping
    gravity's fantasy.
    Reality breaks my eye lens,
    return to esp synthetically...




    Submitted on 2005-08-13 16:15:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      not bad..

    I could be wrong.. but are you refering to yourself as a vein of the earth?
    If so this poem kindof in some way makes sense to me..

    "Reality breaks my eye lens,
    return to esp synthetically"

    ok I dont know what esp means.. but seeing you wear glasses i kindof thought that maybe you were dreaming.. day dreaming.. and then you came back to reality..
    Your eyes lens broke and you had to use your synthetic ones again (glasses)..

    Its not a bad little poem.. made me think..

    shaun
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm.. I have to say I did enjoy this poem I really felt where you were coming from
    And it all kinda unraveled itself to me like a story it was a good read no real errors any where and I completely understood the situation.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]


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