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    dots Submission Name: Evening Newsdots

    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       Sometimes I get a bit too passionate over very common place things. This is an example of one of those moments. The evening news sent me into a tizzy and this poem resulted.

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    dotsEvening Newsdots

    Politics and poverty
    are ringing in the bathroom mirror
    because apparently
    indifference is not accepted.

    My TV tells me
    "He tried to kill a man
    but his gun jammed."
    Guess it just wasn't his time.
    Alleluia he's alive!
    Thank god that guy didn't die!

    Though, between you and I
    I'll forget this story by tomorrow
    and so well you.
    His poor girlfriend's sorrow
    will be just yesterday's news.

    Because indifference
    is unaccepted
    and society is expected
    to be something just as laughable
    as it is damnable.
    By tomorrow you'll be in a rage
    over some new dead bastard
    who was half that man's age.

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    I really liked this poem
    I often wonder why the media always plays off of negativity
    dont they realize that a story about someone who showed true compassion and love would bring joy and happiness to others
    Do they not care
    My grandpa told me long ago tv was all about money and sadly he was right
    Take Care

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    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm, i get the poltical/social point you're making. its true you have to be seen to care whetehr you do or not. you highlight the ever present debasement of society. and it is a good poem and more importantly a thought provoking poem in terms of content. however its not nessesarily poetry. its more statement, or seems to be to me.

    i like your rhyming however its not forced and makes the piece flow extremely well. also the ending fo this poem has a brillaint ring to it. you also manage to encorparte societies obsession wiht youth inot this poem. i just think it lakcs a little personla invovlement posisbly? it sounds more like its being narrated posisbly. i dunno anyway good job especially the message.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by harri | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there,
    For someone so young, you express with maturity. BKA...your head is on right.
    You told it like it is. Yes the news can make a person react in different ways. Especially when someone young is killed. Overall, this is a good write! take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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