Description: Sometimes I get a bit too passionate over very common place things. This is an example of one of those moments. The evening news sent me into a tizzy and this poem resulted.
Politics and poverty
are ringing in the bathroom mirror
because apparently
indifference is not accepted.
My TV tells me
"He tried to kill a man
but his gun jammed."
Guess it just wasn't his time.
Alleluia he's alive!
Thank god that guy didn't die!
Though, between you and I
I'll forget this story by tomorrow
and so well you.
His poor girlfriend's sorrow
will be just yesterday's news.
Because indifference
is unaccepted
and society is expected
to be something just as laughable
as it is damnable.
By tomorrow you'll be in a rage
over some new dead bastard
who was half that man's age.
I really liked this poem I often wonder why the media always plays off of negativity dont they realize that a story about someone who showed true compassion and love would bring joy and happiness to others Do they not care My grandpa told me long ago tv was all about money and sadly he was right Take Care Ron
Please if you have a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
hmm, i get the poltical/social point you're making. its true you have to be seen to care whetehr you do or not. you highlight the ever present debasement of society. and it is a good poem and more importantly a thought provoking poem in terms of content. however its not nessesarily poetry. its more statement, or seems to be to me.
i like your rhyming however its not forced and makes the piece flow extremely well. also the ending fo this poem has a brillaint ring to it. you also manage to encorparte societies obsession wiht youth inot this poem. i just think it lakcs a little personla invovlement posisbly? it sounds more like its being narrated posisbly. i dunno anyway good job especially the message. harri
Hi there, For someone so young, you express with maturity. BKA...your head is on right. You told it like it is. Yes the news can make a person react in different ways. Especially when someone young is killed. Overall, this is a good write! take care, wanda
Submission Name: Evening News
