I wonder why...

Author: painofthanatos Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684 /571 /86 Words: 76

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I wonder why...

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I hold the phone up to my ear I hear all the miles that seperate us As you talk to your dad Do you even remember I'm still here ...Does Anyone? Your voice echoes through my empty heart As I turn up Mozart a little louder I wonder how your girlfriend's doing Then I wonder why I'd care I wonder why I refuse to let go of you Then I wonder why you'd care...

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turning up the music is anoher reaction to things for me... something about drowning out silence and reminding people youre there... anyways. this was a good poem too. i agree with liv2lovethepain the length fits this.

| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]

Ooo I love this. It's kind of short, but the length is perfect. The words are awesome, sad though. I know exactly what it's like to be on the phone with someone like that and wonder those things. It's hard, but I heard that you eventually let go. I haven't let go yet... I thought I have many times, but there's still those moments when you just know the truth. Anyways, I really hope everything works out for you. You're talented. I like this a lot. As usual, Great job -nikkki

| Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

Other than all of the miles, I have been in that same situation, more times than I'd care to admit, with the same guy...They can let go and move about a million times faster than we can. I think the length is perfect to get your feelings across. Well done.

| Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]

i like the first stanza. its original and it sets the poem up nicely. id be careful of [[Your voice echoes through my empty heart]], because it sounds a little cliché. im conflicted on whether or not i like the repetition in the last stanza....i unno :) maybe try playing with the wording a little keep up the writing, sophie

| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]

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