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    dots Submission Name: Helpless Heartdots

    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       My boyfriend has been Iraq for a few months now....words can't describe how hard it is. I miss him, and I worry every day. Every day it gets harder and harder. Sometimes I just feel so helpless. He's at the hands of a war torn country, and I'm here. Just needed to get this out I guess. Thanks for reading!

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    dotsHelpless Heartdots

    Never thought wed end up like this.
    Never thought wed be so apart.
    After all of the fight, to get where we are,
    This could be one war, stronger than us.

    I sit here alone, with a pen in my hand,
    Writing you letters of love, encouraging words.
    I can fake it all that I want,
    But theres nothing I can say,
    Nothing I can do,
    Im just one helpless heart,
    Wanting to be there for you.

    Kiss your picture goodnight,
    Ask the Lord for your safety,
    Cry tears on my pillow,
    And pray that you know,
    Im here for you, wherever you go.

    Ill be home soon.
    I can hear the smile over the phone,
    When he talks of our love,
    And our future together.
    But who are we fooling?
    Has it just been too long?
    Have we been through too much?
    Youre just a man, and Im just a girl.
    Im just one helpless heart,
    Wanting to be there for you.

    Submitted on 2005-08-13 19:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is really sad it almost made me want to cry because there are people this war is affecting and it is just soo sad. I hope you know that if you are really in love, nothing can break it apart, so don't loose faith in god. Good luck and nice write. They says poems come out better if done from the ehart and I think yours is really good.

    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Lauren Guzman | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you expressed your fears of him being over seas, very clear and well. I'm sorry to hear that you both are apart from eachother. I don't know what to say to you other than keep doing what you doing. And you writing about your feelings will help alot. Great writing and good flow.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope that things work out between you two i can tell through your poem that you guys really love each other and i think that when he comes back he'll be happy to know you're waiting... nice job...loved the style and flow
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      im not going to critisize this poem because it isnt here for that, it more just to get some of the weight of your chest than anything. you certainly expressed everything clearly and precisely- with everything he's gone through i bet he will have changed, but he will love you just the same when he gets back. hope everything turns out ok for you.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
      One thing.. Do not give up hope. Second, I don't have a boyfriend in Iraq, but I did have a brother there. He made it back after an airplane injury, but he made it back. If the love is strong, it will make it through. I'm sure of it. Love always finds a way, and sometimes it is the least expected thing you'll think of.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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