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    dots Submission Name: The Pianistdots
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    Author: Judy
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 579/569/93
    Words: 861
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 367
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Inspired by the movie of the same name. By my standards, this is long. So I'd really appreciate if anyone takes time to reads this through and tell me what they think.


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    dotsThe Pianistdots
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    Fingers wove life on the ivory and ebony keys
    Music that floated mesmerized the world
    as everyone stopped to listen
    As his fingers danced with the keys,
    the Pianist became one with the Muse

    A good life he led,
    living with the ones he loved
    doing what he was born to do
    Sharing it with the world
    being Celebrated for it
    the voices of concern didn't bother him
    they didn't seem real
    Life was good and he was untouched

    Like a wall that suddenly forgot its duty
    His protection sphere crumbled.
    But it wasn't so terrible, was it?
    True no longer celebrated
    He was still playing the piano
    It would be okay.
    Not even the sign
    that said "No Jews allowed"
    had him dismayed.
    Temporary - that's what it was

    The fingers that once wove magic now sold books
    to people who could not afford to pay
    Forced out of his home -
    leaving Everything behind
    Would he play again?

    An old man in a wheelchair
    thrown out of the window
    because he could not stand and run
    like his family did
    just before they were shot down.
    The jeeps ran over their bodies
    and brought out a final cry
    from a man who's life had not yet ebbed out
    No dignity even in death.
    Things would never be the same again

    Questions raised with no answers in sight
    Philosophical, practical - nothing shed light
    when the next hand of evil struck
    he was separated from the ones he loved
    whipped and starved at every opportunity
    the fingers that played with ivory keys
    transported bricks for his enemies

    The final journey of his hell on earth,
    thought the pianist bitterly
    Perhaps the death camp was their only ticket out
    The journey would be arduous
    children, women and men
    packed like tuna in a can
    treated much worse.
    But death was not meant to be
    an unexpected hand reaches out in the nick of time.
    But where can he flee?
    He's lost everyone he loved
    rock bottom in the pit of anguish&#8230;
    but refuge he finds
    for the moment Safe
    The music resurfaces -
    if only in his head.

    Night after night
    Frightened
    Hungry for a mere morsel
    body raking with Fever
    abandoned by one he trusted
    afraid to move,
    scared to breathe,
    frightened that someone might begin to see
    and he'll be turned out
    and shot at - with no second thought

    Saved for a second time from the hands of death
    nursed back to health
    somehow the music plays on

    A sudden attack!
    the bombers are bombed!
    Dare he hope?
    Is this salvation?
    But the cloud passes with no sign of rain.
    The rebels fall to their death.
    Those that tried to run fall on the street
    with a hole in their head,
    dragged by a limb,
    piled up and burnt.

    Run!
    his refuge no longer safe
    into the city that once teemed with life
    now lying ravaged
    like a nightmare that came true
    the hunger gnaws as he searches for a food
    and a hiding place

    A tin - Unopened!
    Grabbing it, he flees from place to place
    till in an attic he thinks he's safe.
    Gunfire, bombs, he sits down and weeps
    Wondering why this isn't all a bad dream
    Wondering why he's still alive to witness the scene

    He noises cease
    Running out of tears,
    he begins to breathe.
    On to the business of trying to survive,
    Emotions take a backseat.

    He finds a poker to open the tin.
    (Look at him
    a wasted image
    almost no being left in that human being)
    There's no strength in his weary arms
    Yet the constant effort pays,
    A small opening
    (Hope inside?)

    But the tin slips,
    the liquid seeps,
    rolling,
    spilling on the ground.
    Helpless eyes watch,
    Pent-up emotions resurface
    but that doesn't begin to compare
    to the fear that grips him
    when he sees that the telltale tin
    at the feet of a German.

    The Pianist prepares to meet
    what he once thought could cheat.
    Yet a sudden light shone
    Music built a bridge when all else was gone
    The Jew and the German stood behind
    as two lovers of art crossed the line
    the Pianist played the piano
    like he had never done before.

    Risking his life,
    the man across enemy line
    provided food and a warm coat.
    Later he died - but not as 'unknown'
    The Pole never forgot

    The cordon of evil was broken
    But lives were scarred forever
    Would they ever forget?
    Would they ever forgive?
    Would they ever laugh
    or even smile again?

    Yet the music re-emerged
    More meaningful than ever
    Echoing with it, the celebration that it was
    Thankfulness for each new day
    Echoing with it sadness, yet kindness
    And a human spirit that had defied even the darkest days




    Submitted on 2004-04-14 11:09:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this has lots of potential, but I would like to see less plot from the movie and perhaps more character here. I think to anyone, even if they haven't seen the movie, the story would be pretty evident with only hints. This is a very good piece. I clicked on it because I saw so many views but so few comments left.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice work, but I didn't get "the bombers are bombed!"

    This is a good start to the great poem it will be after some revision.

    Sometime revisiting a piece after 6 months can do wonders.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      I forgot to say that I found the random capitalization interesting. Like "Celebrated" in the opening stanza and then "celebrated" in the following stanza... sort of a percursor to diminshing glory. Nice effect.
    Peace, O
    | Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by Occam | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! You must have really liked the movie. Adrian Brody looked a little too haunted for my liking, but I suppose it was appropriate casting.

    Anyway, great poem -- but the best parts of the poem are its beginning, where you bring us your perspective, for instance, "Like a wall that suddenly forgot its duty; His protection sphere crumbled." Nice touch there... but as the work goes on, you seem to be telling the story of the movie. While this is a nice way of telling someone the story of "The Pianist" the book/movie, we don't get to see too much of "Inside Judy's Head When She Saw The Pianist"... that's just my 5-pennyworth of perspective.
    Peace, O
    | Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by Occam | [ Reply to This ]



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