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    dots Submission Name: Real Smiledots

    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       sigh....the bahamas are so beautiful.

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    dotsReal Smiledots

    Breathe in,
    The air is thick with heat and salt,
    The warmth is not oppressive or harsh--
    But smooth, comforting
    Like a lover's touch.

    The sun's brightness is unmatched
    The light is hope,
    Melting away all sadness and concern
    From your heart like a flame melts wax

    Time is slower,
    Events can be savored,
    And memories are more easily cherished
    Seagulls soar in lazy circles overhead,
    Calling out every once and again,
    The sea laps gently at the sand,
    The water cool on your feet
    As the grains of sand get stuck between your toes.
    It's slightly uncomfortable,
    But you don't mind.
    You have baptized your soul,
    You awake refreshed,
    And your smile couldn't be any more real.

    Submitted on 2005-08-13 20:32:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem gave off a very warm lazy feeling. i usually dont like these kinds of happy poems, but this is the exception. it wasnt too cheesey to the point where ppl want to puke and i liked tht. the only thing is tht i thought the last stanza could actually be split apart into two, other than that , great write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this poem especially these lines Time is slower, Events can be savored,
    And memories are more easily cherished.. these words truely give depth to the poem and left you wishing you had someone to cheish and spwnd the rest of your life with
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      refreshing,relaxing and a very peaceful type poem! it's so nice to read something positive about life.

    You have baptized your soul

    this line is unique and very original.

    you have so much talent. i sure hope you write more of these positive type of poems.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      The words you chose for your poem were spot on. They matched perfectly what you were saying and brought out the essence of the poem to its fullest. It was obviously written with a real sense of love and passion that lies deep within. I enjoyed reading it very much.
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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