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    dots Submission Name: MY abc'sdots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       some of these thoughts just came to me and i felt like i had to put them together in some way but i had to work at a few of them...tell me what you think and if you have any ideas for some that you don't like

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    dotsMY abc'sdots

    angered by 'almost'
    burried in bullshit
    cradled in clarity
    drowning in deception
    embraced by eternity
    flooded by my fear
    grounded by my greed
    hollowed out by hate
    inraged by irony
    jaded by my journeys
    killed slowly with kindness
    murdered by mutiny
    noted as nothing
    obsolete by order
    purified by pain
    quieted through qualms
    ripped apart by rage
    swallowed up in sorrows
    tortured by the teasing
    undaunted by the unity
    vacant in my viciousness
    warped by my wanderings
    X-rated to x-tremes
    yelling about yesterday
    zoned out in zen

    Submitted on 2005-08-13 20:56:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont really know what to make of this poem although it is beautifully written and holds a lot of emotional content, i guess i cant relate. either way i encourage you to write more because you are very talented. i just hope that your mind clears some day, and you are able to escape your pain and torment
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice piece, it's dark and I like that. I've never read anything exactly like this, and I like that because individuality is good! We should all be individual you know? I think that I am individual, but everyone thinks that, and perhaps that means I am just like every other product consumer zombie and my life doesn't mean anything, because I'm just another face, then I realize that I am different, because I think anomolic things at times, I suppose. But I am ranting, anyway, I hope your life gets less painfull and more happyfull.

    Heroes couldn't die this well.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Very emotional Poem I for one was feelin it alot good imagry metaphors and juss a great approach to your subject and you never diviated from your point All and all a Great Read By the way i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]

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